Nemesis

Pining for sun set's break under starlight morai— absent satiny day, but with full nights

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Sotto Poet

Date: 10/17/2023 8:06:00 PM

Congratulations on your win with this brilliant cinquain, Paige

Ink Empress

Date: 10/17/2023 6:26:00 AM

Brilliant wordplay throughout this! I am so happy you tried this form and entered my contest too! I love the flow and how you’ve written “ under starlight morai” i learned a new word too! “ pining for sun sets break” i somehow resonate with that! Thank you for writing. Congratulations on winning

Paige Hind
Date: 10/17/2023 12:18:00 PM

Wow! I can't believe I won! Thanks! :)

Hiya Sharma

Date: 10/16/2023 2:05:00 AM

Oh your wordplay, it's spellbinding and so whimsical! "Sunset's break under starlight mortal" I absolutely love that! Such a gorgeously crafted cinquain poem.. "Absent satiny bask" Ahh, really profound, dear poetess.. Your wordsmithery and poetic skills are so unique.. Loved reading this!!

Sam Kauffman

Date: 10/13/2023 10:11:00 AM

Very intriguing, Paige. Wonderful imagery - "satiny," "sun set's break." Blessings to you!

Mat Ignacio

Date: 10/12/2023 3:19:00 PM

Subtle, edgy, with just the right amount of tension. A pleasure -