Near Twilight

"Sway to the rhythm of summer snow fields. . ." 
(From Tim Ryerson’s Cotton Pickin’ Paradise)


We came upon a cotton field one day
near twilight when the sun was sinking low,
then stopped the car, deciding we would stay.

We reveled in that field of summer snow
and how sun’s radiance upon it shone.
No cares had we, no other place to go!

Parked off the road, we listened to the drone
of gloaming’s insect symphony. You said
the night, like us, was young, and ours alone!

You touched my face as sky lit up with red.
We kissed as darkness fell. Full was the moon
and soft the grass that was our loving bed!

For brilliant Alabama dusks I pine
and nights of moon glow - knowing you were mine.


For the Terza Rima Sonnet Contest of Craig Cornish




a kyrielle sonnet
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

Poem

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

12
A   Avatar
September 26, 2013 at 10:33 PM
lol, Andrea your funny with the comment on my gentle rain 2.... how did it get pass you. good question. your a busy lady on the soup. I'm everywhere and I see you every where. .thanks for commenting one of my OLD poems. thought you forgot about me... as for me I've been enjoying many of your wins... nice going. luv...PD
Babcock Avatar
August 28, 2013 at 3:43 PM
A nice romantic write on this poem Andrea. Been so busy that time has flown and the month is almost gone. I am so behind in my comments and have not written a thing lately. love phyl
Undertaker Avatar
August 13, 2013 at 9:50 AM
congrats on a great win with new new varieties great. (:c Jenish
Morgan Avatar
August 12, 2013 at 6:45 PM
Congrats on your win!
Seal Avatar
August 11, 2013 at 5:06 PM
Congratulations Petal, I expected this to be right up there. Take care, Richard
Kendrick Avatar
August 11, 2013 at 1:33 PM
Congrats on your great winning work..Sara
Muzzey Avatar
August 10, 2013 at 12:48 PM
I once lived across the street from a big cotton field (north Alabama, they were everywhere) but now they are hard to find unless you go to the less populated sections. A wonderful write Andrea, congratulations on your win, I enjoyed the read ~ Caryl Answer to your contest entry- I was too late to enter but enjoyed adding to my collection anyway.
Johnson Avatar
August 9, 2013 at 8:33 PM
I have never seen a cotton field but it should make a nice bed Enjoyed and congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
A  Avatar
August 9, 2013 at 7:02 PM
Andrea, one awesome win....SKAT
Lamoureux Avatar
August 9, 2013 at 6:49 PM
So enjoyed reading this escape into your beautiful mind. Congratulations.
May Avatar
August 9, 2013 at 4:55 PM
this piece exudes love as do many of your poems....congrats on a fine win
Seal Avatar
July 31, 2013 at 5:46 PM
Who doesn't pine for those days,beautifully and emotionally written Petal. Take care, Richard
Horne Avatar
July 27, 2013 at 2:38 PM
lovely romantic write, my friend - a sure winner
Mckenzie Avatar
July 23, 2013 at 8:08 PM
Wonderful it made me smile as you always did in the past! Laura :)
Kendrick Avatar
July 23, 2013 at 8:29 AM
Reads like a winner to me..Enjoyed reading this morning..Those cotton fields ripe for harvest are a beautiful sight..The romance added to the poetic quality of the work..Thanks for the visits to my work..Sara
Phillips Avatar
July 23, 2013 at 3:12 AM
Very strong opening line."Sway to the rhythm of summer snow fields" I like the symbolic contrast used with snow and cotton in this piece.
Ryerson Avatar
July 23, 2013 at 3:05 AM
I am so very honored that you chose my poem as inspiration for this beautiful gem my friend...Hands down winner!...As youngsters, we spent a few summers with our grandparents in Greenville, MS in the heart of the Delta...As mentioned in the poem, it was a dirty, unattractive town but it was paradise to us...Thanks again! - Tim
Sathasivam Avatar
July 22, 2013 at 11:50 PM
Excellent. Beautifully written. Enjoyed. Tfs
Devnath  Avatar
July 22, 2013 at 10:34 AM
Beautiful sonnet, the last line depicts the essence. Good luck in the contest. Loved always, bl
Austin Avatar
July 22, 2013 at 10:01 AM
Never have seen a field of cotton. YOur poem makes we wish to see one some day. Love, daver
Ober Avatar
July 22, 2013 at 7:48 AM
Simply gorgeous, my talented poet friend! You make this form look easy, and I know for a fact that it's not. Well done :)
White Avatar
July 22, 2013 at 5:55 AM
I feel like a moon pie now! Nice country write my o'l freind. GL and Smiles
Delaney Avatar
July 21, 2013 at 9:48 PM
Flows so easily with faint memories of Robert Frost's "Stopping by Woods on a Snowy Evening". This will place very well. SuZ
Haick Avatar
July 21, 2013 at 9:02 PM
Beautiful, enchanting, poem, Andrea! Love it! Best wishes for the contest though you definitely don't need it! Always, Annalise
May Avatar
July 21, 2013 at 7:29 PM
very nice write Andrea....best wishes
12
Get a Premium Membership
Turn off ads, get more exposure for your poetry, and get more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Diverse Voices: The Poetry of Human Rights and the Pursuit of Peace