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Nation of Death

The death nation Made for the fear a new sensation No words, no talks , no negotiation Well seeing is believing Heaven is our motivation Yesterday it was asleep Today nothing is gonna keep The death nation Rising above every situation A nation who loves death , it's not any more a myth

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Robert Masterson

Date: 2/26/2012 11:06:00 AM

The idea here is wonderfully provocative but the rhythm is all over the place for me. It may be my dialect or something else. I really like the subject and you have some great lines but the punctuation is off too. Maybe, "no words, no talk, no negotiations". I also think you should break the last line into two to keep the short quick pace that you earlier set.

Hammam Hamad
Date: 2/26/2012 11:49:00 AM

Thanks, I hope this idea turns to actions Regards,

Hammam Hamad

Date: 2/26/2012 9:29:00 AM

For Philistine and people of Syria we are coming to help.