Nathan

Between you and I
Nothing has changed
Really.....

These confines we share
Brothers too

Columns and columns
Of phallic glass totums
Piercing the freedoms above
Business is a rapist fiend
Of love

The demonized heavens.

Who am I to judge brother?
I chose to live here

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/9/2013 12:24:00 AM

Kirin, Congratulations with your Featured Poem of the week :-) Take care, and enjoy your wonderful days ahead . Always & Forever! **LINDA**

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 6/8/2013 8:02:00 PM

Lpts to ponder about on your verse.Well penned

Debbie Duncan

Date: 5/27/2013 5:27:00 PM

nicely done Kirin ;}

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 5/3/2013 6:19:00 PM

Thanks so much for stopping by my verses. That's some VERY deep writing!Light & Love

Krystal Cochrane

Date: 5/1/2013 9:26:00 AM

This was interesting, I like it. The last two lines are perfect.

Jeremy Martin

Date: 4/28/2013 12:03:00 PM

Imaginative and unsettling. I like the format of the poem, and how it hovers ominously around in space. Great stuff.

Sheri Fresonke Harper

Date: 4/26/2013 9:16:00 PM

strong wording here, Kirin, nice to meet you, thanks for your comments on my work

Valerie The Heavy Hearted Poet

Date: 4/24/2013 6:16:00 AM

This was a beautiful piece. I really enjoyed reading it. Welcome to the Soup! Thank you for taking the time to stop by my poems. It means a lot!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/19/2013 10:18:00 PM

Hi Kirin, I have a fiance name Nathan, that is why I rushed to this poem. I like the way you express yourself here. .. , "Welcome to the poetry soup. My name is Linda; many poets on the soup call me PD for fun. I'm stopping by to invite you on over to my latest contest --called the “7 wonders” I'm hoping you will consider the enjoyment and challenges we offer in our contest. If you like, please consider my contest. You can find the contest page on the top left hand side. I’m looking forward in reading and enjoying your poems in the future. Today I will start by reading all you have posted this far..... Thanks @-> LINDA <-@"

Kirin Lawrence
Date: 4/19/2013 10:25:00 PM

My oldest brother is named Nathan and the ideas for this poem came from writing a letter back home to Minnesota from my new home in Seattle.

Skat A

Date: 4/19/2013 8:21:00 PM

Kirin, :-), Wishing you a nice warm welcome to the Poetry Soup. I hope you find this community to be one of the best. May you find inspiration by reading some of the poetry written here by other poets, and myself? If you ever want or need feedback on any given poem, please feel free and look me up by clicking on my name anytime you see it.. Luv~*~SKAT"

Kirin Lawrence
Date: 4/19/2013 8:30:00 PM

Appreciate the sentiments