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Naps Hurt

I took a nap on the sand at the beach A little tan was the goal to reach Didn't realize I was that sleepy Until my body burned completely Went from being light skin to peach FOR YOUR SNOOZE YOU CHOOSE CONTEST

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/12/2010 9:59:00 AM

wow!! still enjoyed the second time around..you snooze you lose,..p.d.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 6/28/2010 9:40:00 PM

It can happen.. Faleshia..am so sorry to hear of your vision problems.. hope u will check it out at the doctor and maybe its a simple procedure or surgery as I had to have to correct your vision to make it well again... keeping u in my daily prayers... my friend... let me know what is going on please... with luv from the "Sweetheart" in Hawaii on vacation..

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/20/2010 10:18:00 PM

well, I think peach does not sound as bad as the apple red that I would get!! hahaha. Love it. I think I fell asleep once and really did get burned! LUv, Andrea ps good title to this one too

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 6/20/2010 6:25:00 PM

well--been there and burned! funny

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 6/20/2010 5:33:00 PM

A nice Limerick appropriate to the theme of the poem. Enjoyed. Good luck in the contest

Date: 6/20/2010 5:24:00 PM

Good use of humor for a fun poem. Best wishes in the contest. Thank you for sharing this one with us and for your kind comment. Karen

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/20/2010 5:15:00 PM

Funny one, I was wondering when I read the title, "how can a nap hurt?" lol, enjoyed and good luck on the contest...P.D.