Naked Before Me

I see you with her
and I know from your eyes
your vision whirled
You hold her hand
and when our gaze met
you unclasp it
No need to hide honey
I know we expired
I thought at first
Time would make us wine
But it just turned us into
a fluid in the mouth
Fermented from sleep
sour, smelly, unswallowable
Your ways of loving
were exposed before me
When our gaze locked,
Don't bow your head yet-
I'm still recollecting it
How sweet you love
Rather how sweet you lie?
The way you thawed my heart
by the heat of your tongue
and now I prove
that tongue's no better than a snake's
and Oh! how sensational you love
You always sent me screaming
through the night
But don't be ashamed honey
if your skill is naked before me
Cause I know for certain
That the lady whom you're with
Will fall to no better than my fate.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Dietrich Avatar
October 17, 2010 at 8:49 PM
Hmmm, am I getting this right? the lady left you for another woman? Very interesting this one!! I love how unique some of your lines come off, such as the way you describe time turning you both into a nasty fluid instead of wine! I hope I can still find at least one other poem of yours I have not read yet! this one was great. Andrea
Bloomsfield Avatar
July 22, 2010 at 1:49 PM
Ow now i see,i have read this already,oops :)sooory!
Bloomsfield Avatar
July 22, 2010 at 1:47 PM
Interesting!missed this one!CELENE!
K Avatar
June 25, 2010 at 11:26 AM
Not what I expected when I read the title, but what a fun way to portray a betrayer. I enjoyed it very much. Sasha
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June 22, 2010 at 1:15 PM
stopping by to say thank you for your comment, on my given slam, have anice one,..p.d.
Smith Avatar
June 21, 2010 at 12:17 AM
ah the complications of love... great write though.
Bloomsfield Avatar
June 19, 2010 at 7:26 AM
Betrayal!touching deep poem Juan!Celene
Falotico Avatar
June 19, 2010 at 5:59 AM
Another great write... keep them comming my friend.... Michael
A   Avatar
May 5, 2010 at 10:37 PM
thanks for all your comments, you are too kind thanks for the support on my poems,..p.d.
A   Avatar
May 1, 2010 at 5:36 AM
this is quite the piece to share with someone, when they need to understand how it is,..p.d.
Fry Avatar
April 30, 2010 at 10:00 PM
such strong words for a betrayed heart. Sends a powerful meaning to the heart. -Stacie
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