Nagacourt, Nepal 2003

The hawk lay upon the lazy late afternoon air currents; Floating, circling, spiraling, ever downward. Its wings spread wide, white feather-tips splayed. It teetered on the updraft above the terraced alluvial plains in the lea of the Himalayas. Landing with a compression of desire upon the crumbling limestone outcropping, It stood preening. Waiting, For the next breeze.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008



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Date: 1/4/2010 2:44:00 PM
Deborah, Because of your ability to convey with precision the actions of this hawk, As in your last few lines, I felt a spiritual connection with the hawk-- With nature. Your imagery in this piece is breathtaking. Mahalo, Connie
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Date: 12/19/2008 2:53:00 AM
confusion. I took one English writing course in college and I write poetry for fun. This is my third month at it. Again I appreciate your help and look forward to reading your thought's. GBU Michael
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Date: 12/19/2008 2:51:00 AM
Deborah your a gifted writer. Thank you for your added input on my poem. We usually are very casual on this sight not so critical of other's work's. I will humble myself and accept your input. You are probably an English teacher or something related. I love this write and I can see you are a very skilled writer. I'm not to complicated. I like to write simple and to the point. My word's are word's that most people understand. I want it that way to reach the masses without compromising style or
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Date: 12/19/2008 2:28:00 AM
I love the vision here, very beautiful! I love Hawks, they are such spiritual beings. And you did not upset me at all, I was just explaining my thoughts on personal poetry. :) Also, as far as meter, spacing etc...I have my own style of free verse, so any spacing is how I like it, and how each line stands on its own. WhenI write meter/rhyme etc...I am all over it. :)
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Date: 12/18/2008 4:56:00 PM
Awesome picture you've painted here, Deborah!! Can't think of anything else to say about it ... its a beautiful write. Hope you have a wonderful holiday and that '09 is a good year for you. Glad you are at the Soup!!
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Date: 12/18/2008 4:16:00 PM
What a wonderful picture you have painted here. Wonderful imagery! Sounds like a beautiful place. Glad you liked my poem. Lrts just say I had a moment yesterday! Happy holidays! Love Robin
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