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Mystical Lore of the Moonlight Moth

Mystical amour of moonlight moth's whimsical lure,
a glowing flame in sensual saffron gold attire;
restless tease with every breeze, gilt-cavorting contour,
pale green fluttering, her wings stirring his breath afire.

Lilting lightness in beaming brightness, her dark eyes shine,
in the night renewed flight, fragile love on agile wings;
aerial display of desire's ache amaranthine,
hungry heartstrings crave what evening's ebony brings.

His illumination sparks her imagination,
heart’s replete, breathless beats, she basks in his halo-heat;
fascination with chance her hot romance, damnation,
flame’s fickle spurn, wistful wings burned, by love bittersweet.



Susan Ashley
October 18, 2017


~ First Place ~
Contest: Favorite Rhyming Poem Ever
Sponsor: Laura Loo

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Line Gauthier March 2, 2018 at 7:41 PM Wonderful poem, Susan. Congrats on your win. Susan Ashley March 3, 2018 at 6:10 PM Thank you for sharing your wonderful comments with me Line and for your heartwarming congrats. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Bartholomew Williams March 2, 2018 at 9:21 AM Congratulations on a wonderful poem and placement atop the podium, Susan! I love the palpable imagery, feeling, and passion you used. Nice work!! All good things to you! :) Bartholomew Susan Ashley March 2, 2018 at 6:12 PM Bartholomew, I relish the lovely thoughts you've shared with me. Thank you for your heartwarming comments and kind congrats. Your visit is a delight! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Eve Roper February 28, 2018 at 6:11 PM Susan, congratulations on your great win. Susan Ashley February 28, 2018 at 6:55 PM Thank you Eve for your wonderful comment and kind congrats.. ~Susan

Charlie Smith February 28, 2018 at 3:25 PM Beautiful work Susan, congratulations... Susan Ashley February 28, 2018 at 6:55 PM Thank you Charlie for your wonderful comment and kind congrats.. ~Susan

Beautiful Scars February 28, 2018 at 11:10 AM why am i not surprised to see you at top placement! :) beautifully expressed sweet Susan :)thank you and congratulations on your placement :) -luloo Susan Ashley February 28, 2018 at 6:54 PM Thank you Luloo, for the honor of my placement in your contest.. I'm touched to be on a winner's list with so many talented poets and poetessess. Your contest was a joy to participate in and I thank you for your sponsorship.. BTW, your poem 'You Move Me' left me breathless - what a wonderful love you and your hubby share :)) ~Susan

Paul Callus November 21, 2017 at 2:58 PM Applause for another superb offering, Susan...metaphorically beautiful. I have written about moths and attraction, but never in the way you manage to express yourself. Love the effortless rhyming, alliteration and descriptive ability. ~ Warm regards // paul Susan Ashley November 21, 2017 at 8:48 PM Paul, I receive your generously kind and awesome comment with an appreciative heart and a smile. Your encouraging words mean so much to me and a visit from you is always a shining highlight on my poetry page. My warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Freddie Robinson Jr. November 6, 2017 at 3:40 PM Spinning the passion w/this sizzling hot romantic poetry, Susan. It sparks the midnight flame for sure. Pure poetry. Love and smiles. Susan Ashley November 6, 2017 at 8:31 PM Freddie, thank you for your scintillating comment, your heartwarming words put a smile on my face. Your thoughts you share with me are so appreciated as is your friendship. I'm happy you enjoyed my poem. Love and smiles to you.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich November 1, 2017 at 5:45 PM ahhh, wonderful metaphorical poem, Susan. Was it inspired by a contest? There was a contest a long while back in which we had to do about a moth to the flame and I recall doing this theme myself in sonnet form. Susan Ashley November 1, 2017 at 8:06 PM Andrea, your heartwarming words are always a highlight on my poetry page. This poem was not written for a contest. I just wrote it for the fun of exploring classic relationships like; moths to a flame and then my next poem 'Mystical Lore of the ThunderBeast' explored the relationship between the Sioux people and the buffalo they hunted. Both were written for the joy of writing poetry. Thank you for your kind visit and for sharing your thoughts with me, always appreciated. ~Susan

Jan Allison October 31, 2017 at 6:51 PM Your imagery is absolutely outstanding Susan, you portray the fragility of love and sadly we often end up getting our wings burned - adding this gem to my faves:-) I love the accompanying image too:-) hugs jan xx Susan Ashley October 31, 2017 at 8:58 PM Jan, it pleases me so much to know that you enjoyed my poem! I receive your lovely comment with such appreciation and I thank you for sharing your kindness and valued thoughts with me. Thank you for your visit and for the wonderful fave as well.. ~Susan

Maria Williams October 31, 2017 at 1:11 AM Wow Susan what can I say that the others have not except to say yet again that your words, your rhyme your imagination flow so effortlessly, and as my friend Connie says 'it is to read poetry of this caliber', that I'm also glad to be here. Bravo and adding it to my faves...Maria xx Susan Ashley October 31, 2017 at 8:35 PM Maria, it is with great and humble appreciation that I read your wondrous words of praise and I am thrilled beyond belief to have a poet like you, that I so admire, enjoy my poetry.Thank you for your kindness and beautiful comment Maria, for letting me know that I am growing in a positive direction with my writing and for the fave. That means so much to me coming from you.Hugs and friendship.~Susan

Connie Marcum Wong October 27, 2017 at 5:45 PM Susan, it is to read poetry of this caliber that I come here. This poem is so impressive, in form, in content and presentation. Exquisite! It is going into my Faves! : ) Susan Ashley October 27, 2017 at 10:01 PM Connie, your esteemed words of appreciation for my poem thrill me to no end. Thank you for your generously wonderful comment, the fave and for sharing your treasured thoughts with me. With much appreciation, my warmest regards to you always! ~Susan

Arthur Vaso October 26, 2017 at 10:21 PM I missed this, the two poems go well together, and I love the imagery!! Susan Ashley October 27, 2017 at 3:42 PM Hi arthur, I so appreciate your wonderful comment and I'm very happy you enjoyed my poem. Thank your for sharing your lovely thoughts with me! ~Susan

Gary Smith October 25, 2017 at 7:03 PM Just lovely Susan :) Susan Ashley October 25, 2017 at 8:37 PM I appreciate your kind visit and comment Gary. Thank you! ~Susan

Ralph Sergi October 24, 2017 at 1:00 PM Delightfully as a Shakespeare fugue ask it beams toward a damning flame. My compliments! Susan Ashley October 24, 2017 at 7:38 PM Thank you Ralph, always a pleasure to receive a lovely comment from you. I so appreciate your kind visit and wonderful thoughts. ~Susan

John Gondolf October 24, 2017 at 6:41 AM Wow, Susan, such a beautiful poem. I love the internal rhyming. John Susan Ashley October 24, 2017 at 7:37 PM Hi John, thank you for your heartfelt comment. Much appreciation for your wonderful visit and lovely thoughts. ~Susan

Robert Lindley October 22, 2017 at 1:25 PM A truly masterful piece my friend.. Deep, colorful and so clearly evident of inspired and great poetic talent.. A fav... Susan Ashley October 22, 2017 at 6:14 PM Robert, what a beautiful and generous comment! Thank you such much, my friend, for your uplifting words that brought a smile to my face. I so appreciate your wonderful visit, sharing your treasured thoughts with me and for the fav. Many thanks... ~Susan

Winged Warrior October 22, 2017 at 10:39 AM As poetic as they come...and you keep bringing them...carry on soldier...god bless...^WW^ Susan Ashley October 22, 2017 at 6:08 PM Winged Warrior, I so appreciate your visit and was pleased to receive your wonderful comment. Your lovely words on my poetry page are always a highlight and always gives me a smile. Thank you very much for sharing your valued thoughts with me. God bless you... ~Susan

Debbie Duncan October 21, 2017 at 8:19 PM Very nice :) Susan Ashley October 22, 2017 at 5:38 PM Thank you Debbie for your visit and kind comment. ~Susan

Suzanne C. Goudreau October 21, 2017 at 3:02 PM Wow! How artistic is this read. A beautiful masterpiece my dear. Your descriptions are exquisite, your metric rhyming has a delightful beat and also you've penned awesome imagery. Ty for sharing. A moving read indeed.Ty for your kind comment! Susan Ashley October 22, 2017 at 5:42 PM Suzanne, I appreciate your kind and generous comment so very much. Thank you for your wonderful visit and sharing your valued thoughts with me, your words are very uplifting! ~Susan

Bernard Chan October 20, 2017 at 7:29 PM Another nice one, Susan. You're a master alliterationist :) Love especially that second stanza. Exquisite. Susan Ashley October 21, 2017 at 10:52 AM Bernard, it's always a great pleasure to receive your visits and kind words. Thank you for being so supportive and encouraging of my poetry. Your valued thoughts, that you share with me, are held in high regard because of the respect I have for your artistry as a poet... I so appreciate your time to read and kindly comment on my poem... ~Susan

Alexis Y. October 20, 2017 at 3:21 PM Hi Susan, You have penned a well written piece about love that turned bittersweet. I found it to be so poetic. Good flow and good rhymes. I agree with Silent ,you are a master at putting words together. Excellent job:-) Alexis Susan Ashley October 21, 2017 at 10:41 AM Alexis, I cherish your beautiful comment. Thank you so very much for your kind visit and for sharing your valued thoughts with me... ~Susan

Silent One October 20, 2017 at 3:05 PM Thats a great last stanza, I must say again, I really do like the way you pair your words... Nice alliteration, in particular that last line, which is a great finish to your poem... Susan Ashley October 21, 2017 at 10:40 AM Silent One, your response to my poem is very encouraging and pleasing. Your kind words help me to thrive, strive and explore my imagination... With much appreciation, thank you for sharing your well-esteemed thoughts with me. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich October 19, 2017 at 8:54 PM Dark love. I really enjoyed the "halo-heat" line and the whole last verse really ended this in an awesome way. Susan Ashley October 20, 2017 at 9:06 AM Thank you Andrea for your wonderfully kind words. I am so happy you enjoyed my poem. Your lovely visits and insightful comments are always such a pleasure for me to receive! ~Susan

Arturo Michael October 19, 2017 at 5:40 AM Good morning Susan...I really enjoyed the poem. "Fascination with chance, hot romance her damnation," That's been the damnation of many... They fall for the show.... Good one...Have a lovely day Susan Ashley October 20, 2017 at 9:02 AM My dear friend Arturo, with great appreciation, I thank you for your treasured thoughts and lovely words. Thank you so much for you wonderful comment, I am so happy you enjoyed my poem! I hope it is warm and sunny where you are today! Many thanks for your friendship...

Janice Canerdy October 18, 2017 at 9:44 PM Well-written, lively, and descriptive, Susan! Janice Susan Ashley October 20, 2017 at 8:24 AM Thank you so much Janice for your lovely visit and comment. I value and hold your wonderful feedback in high regard... ~Susan