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My Universe of Bull

My vacuum cleaner’s broken, sits in the garage gathering dust Beside dad’s old green car, oxidising an orangey rust I tried washing it last week, and the water turned to wine Well the colour miraculously looks, venetian turpentine World weary in a dusty brain, contemplating null dividends Doubtful the universe grew from zero, to mere accidental existence I’m never sure of anything, other than opening up my eyes When intelligence outsmarts evolution, worlds of meaninglessness arrives Nothing ventured everything gained, the cosmos just gave and came Dust clumped together, galaxies burst forth into flame No blueprint just chaos, serendipity’s our only friend Instructions out the window, laws of physics can’t comprehend Anyway God created us, a few millennia after we made him Mankind needed order, to rid an infernal world of sin I mean who’d hold faith in dust, when all is said and done Well some of us actually do, on the mantlepiece in an urn Yeah I’m full of bull, this agnostic needs little imagination I’m wasting space on the fence, making these observations I watch dust versus crosses, and a universe going bust Neurons keep me company, as my brain churns out mush Sponsored by: Charles Messina King-Size Bull Crap Poetry Contest 01/12/22 rhyme form

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Date: 1/19/2022 6:29:00 AM
This is undoubtedly one of the most exciting poems I've read in the last several days! From the very beginning to the very end, I appreciated every sentence. Congratulations on your well-deserved win. In my modest view, it contains all of the essential qualities of excellent poetry. I'm not sure how I went so long without discovering this treasure.
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David Kavanagh
Date: 1/19/2022 8:57:00 AM
Thank you Lasaad, I thoroughly enjoyed writing this piece of rhetorical bull, I’d love to say I’m near to unlocking reality, but doubt I even scratch the surface with my infinitesimal immaterial comprehension of the cosmos, cheers David
Date: 1/18/2022 9:14:00 PM
" I’m full of bull" - Beautifully written. Great work. Congratulations!
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David Kavanagh
Date: 1/19/2022 12:10:00 AM
And a whole poem to prove it Alex, reality is completely different than the way we discern it, but it suits humanities purpose, thank you for stopping by, cheers David
Date: 1/18/2022 7:47:00 PM
You write in fine, powerful form, David. I can attest, your brain functions sharply - no dust, mush or rust. Congratulations on an engaging contest entry + win! Brian
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David Kavanagh
Date: 1/19/2022 12:07:00 AM
Thank you Brian, I just have a sense of feeling, that reality is not as it seems, and if to be taken at face value, it really does appear full of bull, I must search my own path for answers, cheers David
Date: 1/18/2022 11:49:00 AM
Awesome poem, David. It's a crazy world we live in today. It's hard for me to believe things that I see and hear unless I see it or hear it with my own eyes and ears. Great stuff! Congratulations on your win! Charlie
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David Kavanagh
Date: 1/18/2022 12:17:00 PM
Thanks Charlie I appreciate and am delighted with your placement, where does the crap stop and begin, your right just believe what you see, and then look again to be certain, cheers David
Date: 1/13/2022 3:51:00 PM
David, it’s true.., we do time-share the same brain. You have an uncanny habit of putting the written word to my contemplations… strangely, better than I do. But at least I can rejoice in the knowledge that if I’m a complete nut-job… I’m not alone in the universe. Podium finish I reckon. Terry
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David Kavanagh
Date: 1/14/2022 1:12:00 AM
Thank you Terry, Either we share the same brain or are tapping into the underlying reality of this crazy world, I don’t believe we’re nut jobs for pointing out the obvious, still I err on the agnostic side simply because I don’t see enough evidence to be apostate, damn intelligence really does mess with the mind, cheers David
Date: 1/13/2022 9:57:00 AM
David, this is by far one of the neatest poems I have read in weeks! I enjoyed every line from beginning to end. It has all of the elements of good poetry, in my humble opinion. This should be a Poem of the Day!
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 1/13/2022 11:11:00 AM
I wholeheartedly agree, David.
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David Kavanagh
Date: 1/13/2022 11:00:00 AM
High praise Milton, thank you very much for kind comments, this poem about bull ironically makes more sense to me, than some of the crap I hear and see in everyday life, cheers David
Date: 1/13/2022 3:55:00 AM
In this twisted universe sometimes it's impossible to distinguish the truth from the crap. Good entry for the contest David. Hope your week is going well.. Tom
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David Kavanagh
Date: 1/13/2022 4:03:00 AM
The story of my life Tom, trying to understand reality, I keep putting 2 and 2 together but the answer’s always 3, thank you so much for stopping by, the weeks flying by, enjoy your weekend, cheers David

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