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Greg Barden and I had a 'poppy dialogue', after he read this poem of mine on my blog, and I realised I never posted it here. Read Greg's poppy poem here:

https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/poppies___a_deadly_beauty_909523

My lovely short-lived flower Your sweet red tender petals Raised proud towards bright sunlight So frail, endlessly frail I am with you in your garden Kneeling down between you Curling up while listening To your soft red whispering The blue sky high above us Is playing with your colour The yellow sun completes it Primary shades of lost lives This is the perfect setting Of sun and your short life’s end Give me the peace to stay here Like you I will be reborn *** June 15, 2017 Iambic trimeter Copyright © Darren White

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Date: 6/21/2017 4:28:00 AM
You already know how much I love this one ... so descriptive and lyrical ... I'm glad you posted it - it needs to be seen!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/21/2017 4:42:00 PM
I didn't even NOTICE! Thank you for pointing that out and for the kindness ... that was very thoughtful of you, DW! :-)
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Darren White
Date: 6/21/2017 4:36:00 AM
Yes, it needs to :) And that's why I added the link to your poem.
Date: 6/17/2017 9:24:00 AM
Hello friend. Its been a while. LORD! This is just vintage you! Excellent, Awesome and a master in this covetous craft of writing. Keep on flowing the ink of your mind. A 7 for sure.
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Darren White
Date: 6/17/2017 2:34:00 PM
I missed you, I just came back home, and saw you placed a number of new poiems yourself! I'm too tired to review tonight, but I promise to in the morning :)
Date: 6/16/2017 6:33:00 AM
I really love the meter in this poem Darren, and yes a hard form I'm sure but you've mastered it, no doubts about that.Now about the poem, it is truly wonderful, and you are a very gifted young man indeed...Maria, xxx
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Darren White
Date: 6/17/2017 6:42:00 AM
Thanks for your kind comment my friend :)
Date: 6/15/2017 11:59:00 PM
Iambic trimeter!!! Is there nothing you can't write! What a magnificent poem is this! In every aspect!
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Darren White
Date: 6/17/2017 6:41:00 AM
Lol Budge! Thanks my friend :)
Date: 6/15/2017 9:48:00 PM
They love it and yet you hate it for all the ruined lives. Yes, "the poppy is also a flower." A very well written poem, I like the meter.
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Darren White
Date: 6/17/2017 6:41:00 AM
Exactly Janis.... A very double feeling.
Date: 6/15/2017 2:44:00 PM
This is so sweet and pure-you take us to the meadow and the beautiful, bright red poppies <3
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Darren White
Date: 6/17/2017 6:37:00 AM
Thank you my friend :)
Date: 6/15/2017 7:11:00 AM
This is so beautiful Darren. A peaceful feel to this poem reading it :)
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Darren White
Date: 6/15/2017 7:39:00 AM
Thank you Heidi, yes, I have the same feel while reading it :)
Date: 6/15/2017 6:45:00 AM
Another beautiful poetic offering from your gifted pen. You have painted a beautiful garden in this one, where spring is alive and the flowers are blooming and I love the ending. Perfectly done Darren.
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Darren White
Date: 6/15/2017 6:47:00 AM
Thank you so much my friend :) I love this poem too. On my blog it is accompanied by a watercolor painting by my friend, but I cannot post that in public without her permission.