My Story Book Castle

Near the cold, brackish waters, wretched with bogs 
where a gust of the sea wind, lifts the veil of the fog
a rider, approaches, through the branches of trees

As his steed has a thirst, having need for a rest, 
and paws at the earth with a fumbling stance
There comes, just a moment to glance all around

While his horse takes a nibble, on the stubble of grass
His eyes focus in, with a curious chance,
In the strange cloistered fortress, with a lift of the dew
is a brooding old castle.....and the story, ensues......... 

A forgotten old castle, with moss covered stones
On the edge of a forest, in the thick of the sound
It is riddled with mystery, not a soul to be found
Yet his curious nature, invites him to prowl

Near the top gabled window, does fair maiden look down?
Waiting the chance to call out, or come down
dark spells to intruders, of which he is one...
Care not!  He is fearless, with courage unbound

With panther feet nimble, not a step to be heard
Will a flash of a sword, find a gallows disturbed
or chains of a dungeon, waiting to fill
with no one the wiser.....no fret from the hill?

The arched bolted doors, have weathered the storms
He carefully knocks, yet the doors guard the lore
Nothing shouts out, not a bell left to chime
So he climbs to a cove, that lies over the door
And into a chamber ....to startle the girl!

She has waited for rescue, since a frightened young child
Her blue eyes are oceans like the sea in the sun
He sweeps off the floor, her delicate frame
and her eyes are so large,  he almost falls in

It takes not a word to calm and convince
Together they flee, from this dark prison's cell
And a story book ending,,,,, is the one that I tell


~

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 8/25/2013 2:28:00 PM
Beautifully written! I'll bet they lived happily ever after..... Congratulations.... Love ya dearly.... Jake
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Date: 8/25/2013 3:06:00 AM
inspired indeed Congrats on yr win. Morgan
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Date: 8/24/2013 7:52:00 PM
congrats Carrie,...love ~SKAT
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Date: 8/23/2013 4:27:00 PM
lovely tale Carrie enjoyed greatly congrats on win Shadow x smile
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Date: 8/22/2013 12:44:00 PM
Thisbisban epic piece, congrats!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/22/2013 12:45:00 PM
I meant to say this is an epic piece!
Date: 8/22/2013 11:04:00 AM
GREAT! I'm having a ton of fun reading these poems in the contest... Congrats on the win!
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Date: 8/21/2013 7:12:00 PM
You tell a great story Carrie...congrats on a great win
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Date: 8/21/2013 6:08:00 PM
From where he enters the castle until he leaves is so unutterably appealing! All expressed in quaint words and such idealistic scenes. I hope you won't mind, but I thought the last verse a rather abrupt departure from the preceding subject, and thus think that it flows better without.
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Date: 8/7/2013 10:02:00 AM
hi Carrie marvelous tale love it Shadow x smiles gl in contest
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Date: 8/6/2013 4:04:00 PM
you've been here longer than I Carrie, and you never fail with your wonderful poetry, this is amazing truly is...
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Date: 8/2/2013 10:49:00 AM
OMG! I was hooked AGAIN with your work! I want to see Neverending Story, Lord of the Rings, & Robin Hood: Men in Tights now. 2 out of 3 ain't bad. ;-)
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