Alyssa Lorette Poet Rictameter

My Rainy Muse

My rainy muse
clouds my mind's vision.
Colorblind to this deep blue
sea of tear-filled ambiguity.
These dim thoughts of mine want to drown me in it.
Though, I can't even swim in here.
Weights keep me down to the bottom.
Please...I cannot...
...breathe now...

Written On: July 2nd, 2017
Form Chosen: Rictameter
Word Chosen: "Rainy"
Contest: Form R
Sponsor: Broken Wings

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Susan Ashley December 1, 2017 at 3:59 PM Alyssa, the depth of your emotion is deep and beautifully expressed. I was feeling your words more so than reading them. Inspired poetry.. Warmest wishes ~Susan

Jeremy Smith July 5, 2017 at 2:06 PM This is great :) the shape as well! Best of luck in the contest!! Alyssa Lorette July 5, 2017 at 2:23 PM Thank you so much, Jeremy! :)

Janice Canerdy July 3, 2017 at 4:52 PM Gripping and emotional--especially line 4. I really like this, Alyssa! Janice Alyssa Lorette July 3, 2017 at 6:31 PM Thanks, Janice! :)

Janis Medders Tobechi July 2, 2017 at 11:44 AM You have done a wonderful job with this form. Good luck in the contest. Well written. Alyssa Lorette July 2, 2017 at 11:49 AM Thank you, Janis! :)