My Private Universe

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within the walls of my mind
spins a galaxy the neon nebulae 
a cosmos turning and churning
spinning stars spitting meteor showers
asteroids and meteoroids twirling
satellites of a reality on a whim 
drifting in the sea of night
floating barely avoiding collision with
the supernova of wonders and what ifs



AP: 1st place 2025, 3rd place 2021

Submitted on October 10, 2020 for contest COMPLETELY YOUR CHOICE (24) sponsored by BRIAN STRAND - RANKED 1ST

and on September 14, 2020 for contest MY PRIVATE UNIVERSE sponsored by JULIA WARD

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 10/12/2020 12:31:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. I love your write and picture. "Wonderful" Your line, "within the walls of my mind" speaks volumes. Enjoy your win.............

Line Gauthier
Date: 10/12/2020 2:09:00 PM

Thank , Paula. Most appreciated ~

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 10/11/2020 9:25:00 PM

...to culmination of that last wonderful line! Congratulations!

Line Gauthier
Date: 10/12/2020 5:39:00 AM

Thanks for your much appreciated visit and comment, Kim.

Lonna Blodgett

Date: 10/11/2020 7:52:00 PM

Line what a journey you have created with this wonderful metaphoric wonderland! Love it

Line Gauthier
Date: 10/11/2020 8:02:00 PM

Thank you so much, Lonna. Much appreciated ~

Sam Kauffman

Date: 9/14/2020 4:33:00 PM

"Spinning stars spitting meteor showers," "reality on a whim," "avoiding collision with the supernova," - what wonderful images and beautifully spun metaphor, Line. This is sure to be a winner! All the best for the contest!

Line Gauthier
Date: 9/15/2020 11:41:00 AM

Thank you so much for your lovely comment, Sam.