My Path

Desire strong as the concrete beneath my feet Missteps hinder my stride along a winding course Signs clearly marked "Proceed With Caution" Muscles scream to try something new Never knowing what direction to turn Exhausted I throw caution to the wind Gasping in the air with trepidation Running as fast and as far as I can I seize the opportunity to test my endurance Is it a marathon or merely a sprint this course I am on I won't let it be a dead end, I won't submit I will have my answer, I will reach my destination

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Caren Krutsinger

Date: 4/3/2018 8:11:00 AM

With your permission, may I use your poem to teach my 4th grade students about tenacity and persistence? Thanks.

Carol B.
Date: 9/27/2018 7:53:00 PM

I was wondering if you did share my poem with your class?

Carol B.
Date: 4/3/2018 5:11:00 PM

I am flattered. Feel free to use my poem. Have a great day :)

Silent One

Date: 10/19/2017 9:16:00 AM

Philosophical reflections always make the best poetry.. I enjoyed your journey.. Well expressed Carol..

Bl Devnath

Date: 5/11/2017 10:45:00 AM

Beautiful poem on pragmatic view of life. Philosophical touch is polished beautifully. A 7 i feel. First time i have read your this beautiful poem. Loved always, bl

Carol B.
Date: 5/11/2017 2:50:00 PM

Thank you for your kind comment :)

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 3/11/2017 1:10:00 AM

The answer will come and one step at a time. When we take care of our own path, there is a destination at the end, and as we stride as well. Many wishes, Kai

Carol B.
Date: 3/11/2017 1:49:00 PM

Thanks for stopping by and for lovely comment :)

Funom Makama

Date: 3/8/2017 6:54:00 AM

Yet another masterpiece from a role model. This is just awwwwwwww... What a beautiful share...

Carol B.
Date: 3/10/2017 4:51:00 PM

Thank you for liking my poem and for your kind comment :)

Arthur Vaso

Date: 1/28/2017 8:11:00 PM

I Just dropped by to add some more pressure! LOL Hope to see more of your writings soon, and just wishing you well in this new year!!!

Carol B.
Date: 1/31/2017 5:45:00 PM

Happy New Year to you as well Arthur. It's very kind of you to drop by my poetry.

Chuck Melugin

Date: 1/23/2017 2:09:00 AM

Carol, you take determination to the nines is this work! Bravo, Chuck

Carol B.
Date: 1/23/2017 4:08:00 PM

Thanks for the nice comment.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/24/2016 1:13:00 AM

Keeping on the path is never easy, but the rewards are great. I love your poem Carol! Have a wonderful Holiday! 7 : )

Carol B.
Date: 1/14/2017 3:25:00 PM

Thanks! I hope you had a wonderful holiday Connie.

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 12/5/2016 6:21:00 AM

Excellent. Very inspiring write. Well penned. Thanks for sharing it.

Carol B.
Date: 1/14/2017 3:27:00 PM

Thank you!

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 12/2/2016 9:13:00 PM

Very inspiring poem, Carol. The perseverance is passionately expressed. Well done. A thought provoking poem for sure. Love and joy to you.

Carol B.
Date: 1/14/2017 3:27:00 PM

Thanks Freddie!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/2/2016 12:30:00 PM

I like your path! Well said.

Carol B.
Date: 12/2/2016 5:54:00 PM

Thanks Richard :)

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 11/30/2016 9:51:00 AM

A heart becomes intrepid when the truth senses dear Carol! Such a meaningful and inspiring poem. Keep it up! A seven!

Carol B.
Date: 11/30/2016 4:55:00 PM

Thanks so much Demetrios :)

Phil Capitano

Date: 11/30/2016 7:41:00 AM

You are as strong as you need to be; your determination will serve you well. Namaste.

Carol B.
Date: 11/30/2016 4:56:00 PM

Thanks Phil! I sure hope so :)

Becca Teagan

Date: 11/29/2016 5:49:00 PM

This is determination!!! I love this.. it's very motivating :) and beautifully written.

Carol B.
Date: 11/29/2016 6:11:00 PM

Thanks Rebecca :)

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 11/29/2016 1:21:00 AM

Excellent. Well penned. Pleasure to read your poem today. Well come my friend.

Carol B.
Date: 11/29/2016 1:33:00 PM

Ravi, Thanks so much for the lovely comment!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 11/27/2016 10:32:00 AM

Your running will turn into dancing and eventually you will fly.

Carol B.
Date: 11/27/2016 10:43:00 AM

Richard one never knows where they will end up :)

Arthur Vaso

Date: 11/27/2016 12:46:00 AM

Still waiting for part 2!!! :)

Carol B.
Date: 11/27/2016 10:45:00 AM

lol no pressure :) Arthur thanks for your continued support!

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 11/22/2016 8:15:00 AM

Profound with optimistic messages dear, Carol! A seven. I would like to welcome you to our poetic family where many good people express their ideas! Hope you to be happy among us!

Carol B.
Date: 11/22/2016 9:36:00 AM

Thank you Demetrois. I am truly touched by this comment and the warm welcome to the soup.:)

Dm Babbit

Date: 11/21/2016 1:07:00 PM

You go girl. Find your place on the soup, welcome.

Carol B.
Date: 11/21/2016 4:42:00 PM

Thank you for the support!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/20/2016 2:59:00 PM

That's the attitude, carol... go for the stars; wonderful write.. huggs

Carol B.
Date: 11/20/2016 6:21:00 PM

Nette, Happy you enjoyed this write :)

Frederic Parker

Date: 11/18/2016 8:14:00 PM

To seize life and not let it go , to not wander off its path to gather garbage along the way, rather to smell the fragrant flowers on your chosen course and see the distance both traveled and in sight of the horizon...my first thought after reading your poem..

Carol B.
Date: 11/18/2016 10:45:00 PM

Frederic, I love " seize life and not let it go." Thanks so much for this wonderful comment.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/18/2016 5:38:00 PM

by the way, I bet you sing great! I was in choir groups all through school, but they just did not ignite my passion. It would be awesome to have a truly distinct singing voice!!

Carol B.
Date: 11/18/2016 6:38:00 PM

That's great that you sang in the choir. I bet you can sing as well. I always wanted a sound proof basement so I could sing as loud as I wanted whenever I wanted lol. Thanks for the lovely comment :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/18/2016 5:36:00 PM

this is a really great analogy to life. I more than halfway down my path and I am hoping there is not a sudden cliff drop up ahead!!

Carol B.
Date: 11/18/2016 6:42:00 PM

Andrea my hope for you is that your life is as joyful as you have made people here at the soup. I have seen countless comments from you on people's poems providing support and kindness. It's so wonderful to see your generosity :)

Arthur Vaso

Date: 11/18/2016 2:43:00 PM

I really liked this, and how you ended the poem is screaming for "part2" and so on!!!! :)

Carol B.
Date: 11/18/2016 4:11:00 PM

lol really it's screaming for part two? Thanks for the support and kind words :)

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/18/2016 11:41:00 AM

how encouraging, carol... you uplift with this empowered melody!... live well!..huggs

Carol B.
Date: 11/18/2016 4:12:00 PM

So very happy you found this poem uplifting :) Thanks Nette for your lovely comment.