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My Own Private Beach

“Dance with the waves, move with the sea. Let the rhythm of the water set your soul free.” — Christy Ann Martine

Sundown.  I enter the private beach through a rusty gate.
I walk towards an umbrella and sit in its shadow near my wife
Summer is warm.  Hurrah for the sea that sparkles like a  jewel .
Listen! Surface waves flutter and chase each other toward the beach. 
I walk to the sandy edge mesmerised, listening to the sea’s melodious thrill.
Suddenly, I feel a push and find myself in the cool, wavy water.
I get up, mutter a curse, grab my wife. We plunge into the salty sea, kissing.


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Andresen Avatar
March 24, 2025 at 2:28 AM
- Back with a congrats, Victor :) - hugs
Tor Avatar
March 23, 2025 at 11:16 PM
Great ending Victor sounds like the beach I would love to visit my friend. going off to help rebuild my brothers house Victor I will see you when I get back my friend. Stay well.
George Avatar
March 22, 2025 at 11:08 PM
Hi Victor, you have written about a joyful experience in the salty air of the beach. The key words given are appropriately used in the right place. I hope it's going to be a winner. All the Best.
Buehler Avatar
March 22, 2025 at 10:08 PM
Victor, I enjoyed reading about this happy, summertime adventure, with the delightfully romantic twist at the end. All good wishes. :)
Hind Avatar
March 22, 2025 at 12:41 PM
Sweet - I liked the ending!
Godwin Avatar
March 22, 2025 at 10:31 AM
The last line hit me, you truly delivered a kicker. Made me want to visit the beach which is only 15 min. away. It is of much matter/meaning that you send 'sad' away. All you long to feel again, each person you wish to see again, awaits you. You are wanted HERE for now, but the time will come when you'll wear a joyous and complete smile, feel loved and soothed - spirit wanted me to tell you all that. Meanwhile, keep gifting the world and Soup with your poems and unique poem comments. CayCay
Empress Avatar
March 22, 2025 at 5:38 AM
Dear victor, youv written as always a very descriptive poem and one that paints an ambience any reader would like to be part of. I love the flow and also the quote youv used there. And i must say you have a way with words, i hope you would never delete your poems, amidst the paint and challenges life might throw your way. Please keep sharing and writing as poetry is a form of catharsis and writing is healing. And soupers appreciate you truly. Pleasure reading. Sending you light always
One Avatar
March 22, 2025 at 4:31 AM
Not sure what this contest is about, but you have written seven lines full of great imagery... Best of luck in the contest..
Rolland Avatar
March 22, 2025 at 2:04 AM
beaches are so romantic places, i "envy" your poem and sentiments, great work so inspiring have a sweet week end poet
Gifford Avatar
March 21, 2025 at 3:18 PM
Hello Victor, loved both the picture and your beautiful poem. Good luck in the contest. Have a wonderful weekend, my friend.
Cunningham Avatar
March 21, 2025 at 10:11 AM
No better place to be than the beach Victor, you paint a lovely image. Good luck in the contest. Tom
Andresen Avatar
March 21, 2025 at 9:54 AM
- A lovely day at the beach, Victor - Wish I was there :) - Beautiful lines for the contest, best wishes :) - Have a lovely weekend :) - hugs
Allison Avatar
March 21, 2025 at 9:08 AM
what lovely imagery Victor i especially love "Surface waves flutter and chase each other toward the beach. " i will think of that when I walk by the sea which i do most days here! hugs jan xx
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