My Meteor

My, my, my meteor 
Rocks me to my core

She stains the sky
With shooting star fire
Beside the Milky Way
Only far, far brighter.
She rides rainbows
Seesaws on sky scales
Sits and smells grass grow
Sees the songs of whales.

My meteor’s a metaphor
Soon you’ll see what for
My metaphoric meteor
Rocks me to my core.

An alphabetic artist
She weaves song after song
With word worms wriggling
From her all day long.
I’ve seen her climb clouds
Both hands behind her back
Then move moonbeams
To lay down a light track.

My meteor’s a metaphor
Don’t you know what for?
My metaphoric meteor
Rocks me to my core.

She splits the silence
With her spaced out symphony
They spin sound sparks
Into streams of money.
My metaphoric meteor
Shook me off the floor
At all the gigs I rocked to
On her global tour.

My meteor’s a real rock star 
She lights up the night
Then she crashes down, down, down
To be my meteorite!

My, my, my meteorite,
You are still my rock star light.

23rd April, 2016
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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A  Avatar
June 15, 2016 at 10:41 AM
Daniel, congratulations on your win. Skat
Davies Avatar
June 15, 2016 at 4:03 PM
Thank you Skat!
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June 15, 2016 at 10:26 AM
Way to go, congrats on your win.
Davies Avatar
June 15, 2016 at 4:02 PM
Thank you Richard!
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June 14, 2016 at 3:27 AM
Congrats Daniel, for your top placement with this awesome piece!! :-)
Davies Avatar
June 15, 2016 at 4:01 PM
Thanks Teddy!
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June 13, 2016 at 4:20 PM
Wonderfullly done, It's a hit! Grats on a great second place win!! :)
Davies Avatar
June 13, 2016 at 4:56 PM
Thank you Casarah!
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June 13, 2016 at 3:50 PM
great write, Daniel, congratulations on your win !!!!
Davies Avatar
June 13, 2016 at 4:54 PM
Thanks Eve!
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April 23, 2016 at 2:58 PM
- Welcome to Poetry Soup, Daniel - A skilful first poem, impressive ! - hugs // Sun :)
Davies Avatar
April 23, 2016 at 5:27 PM
Thanks Sunny! Love the avatar!
A  Avatar
April 23, 2016 at 9:56 AM
Hi Daniel, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
Davies Avatar
April 23, 2016 at 5:28 PM
Friendship accepted! And please feel free to embellish me with some info about yourself sometime. Thanks!
A   Avatar
April 23, 2016 at 3:40 AM
Daniel,, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
Davies Avatar
April 23, 2016 at 5:41 AM
Hi ~ that's a lovely way to be welcomed! See you in the soup ;)
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April 23, 2016 at 1:49 AM
That's the way to go! Congrats on your first entry and welcome to Poetry Soup, Daniel. :)
Davies Avatar
April 23, 2016 at 5:45 AM
Thank you ~ I thought I was replying to you when I replied to Poet Destroyer A... doh! I'll get the hang of it, eventually!
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