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My Love Song In Tankas

just in few moments as the dusk obscures the sky lids cover my eyes my mind begins to reckon the things I’ve done the whole day a flurry it was missing the sun in your eyes my heart in regrets didn’t sing you song last night or gave you right back sweet hugs now I sing my song but ice cream melts on its cone what else will I do to win back the love from you and make me smile and heart grows plead down so deeply asking you not to leave me I am so sorry this is the best melody be sung in my poetry I hope you can hear song being played in G-Clef lonely but lovely Tanka Song with love I sing hoping to ease all our pains
Written: Oct. 7, 2012 Second Place Winner Contest: Tanka-Sad Song Judged: 10/21/2012 Poet Sponsor: My Greatest Poet, Poet-Destroyer Fourth Place Winner Contest: Tanka me this, tanka me that, tanka me anypoem you want... Judged: 10/23/2012 Poet Sponsor: SKAT
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Martin Avatar
April 21, 2013 at 12:49 PM
Hey Leonora, a very colorful and lively write. I love the way you used the word 'reckon' in the first stanza. I think it's a beautiful word and the way you used it was very unique.
Harper Avatar
April 19, 2013 at 5:15 PM
Excellent Tanka series for your sad love song Galinta, so glad you visited me!
A   Avatar
November 17, 2012 at 9:31 PM
Good night,,, sis.... tomorrow a long day... xox~pd
Dietrich Avatar
October 24, 2012 at 3:42 PM
I see you have won with this set. It's so nice to see it on the winners' list, Leonora. You worked on this one. Congratulations.
Rozario Avatar
October 24, 2012 at 8:55 AM
Congrats on your win in Sid's contest Leo...wonderful write!!!
Brown Avatar
October 24, 2012 at 5:45 AM
Congratulations on your win in ~SKAT~'s "TANKA ME" contest Leonora. Love, Carol
Sweetheart Avatar
October 24, 2012 at 3:41 AM
CONGRATS LEONORA ON SWEET SUCCESS FOR THIS TREMENDOUS WRITE AND WIN DEAR FRIEND LUV ..
Liwayway Avatar
October 24, 2012 at 2:10 AM
congratulations my dear friend on your win...God bless you always!!! mwuah!! (^_^)
A   Avatar
October 23, 2012 at 7:09 PM
HI MY SWEET SISIE-POOH LEO.... , congratulations with your "Tanka me this, Tanka me that, Tanka me any poem you want :-) LOL.... what a title.. Love it and enjoyed stopping by all my sisters tanka winners... good night... LUV~PD
A  Avatar
October 23, 2012 at 2:13 PM
LEONORA, Congrats on your win' luv * Siddy
Gasun Avatar
October 23, 2012 at 2:55 PM
thank you so much Siddy!
Dietrich Avatar
October 22, 2012 at 3:45 PM
well, lookie there. a BIG win for you and you worked hard on this one! Congratulations!
Brown Avatar
October 22, 2012 at 11:39 AM
Congratulations on your win in P.D."s "Tanka~sad song" Leonora. Love, Carol XXXX
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
October 22, 2012 at 11:20 AM
wonderful stuff leonora ,congratulations xx
Liwayway Avatar
October 22, 2012 at 9:18 AM
big congratulations dear friend Norie for you win. I really like it. a very talented Lady. cheers to you!!! hugs!! (^_^)
Rozario Avatar
October 22, 2012 at 8:53 AM
Great tanka Leonora...many congrats!!!
Susan Avatar
October 22, 2012 at 7:14 AM
congrats on your win Leonora :)
Sweetheart Avatar
October 21, 2012 at 3:49 PM
CONGRATS LEONORA FOR TOPPING THE LIST AGAIN WITH SWEET SUCCESS LUV ..
Roberts Avatar
October 21, 2012 at 1:44 PM
just beautiful Leonora, congrats on your win
Grisetti Avatar
October 21, 2012 at 1:10 PM
congratulations on your win. (your 4th one only has 4 lines)
Grisetti Avatar
October 21, 2012 at 6:34 PM
Thank you for commenting on my David. I have always liked that poem.
Squyres Avatar
October 21, 2012 at 12:10 PM
What a heartfelt song in your verse !! Congrats on your win !!!
A   Avatar
October 21, 2012 at 11:48 AM
Hi Leo, sisie-pooh, , congratulations with your to be or not to be tanka poem in my contest... take care of yourself' I'll be around for another 3 hours...LOL... :-) always~PD
A   Avatar
October 8, 2012 at 9:44 PM
Leonora, I hope this is for my contest... you did good with your tanka's... i feel the song, dropping in my soul... . Thank you for this awesome group of tanka's. Goodnight :-)~ PD
Dietrich Avatar
October 7, 2012 at 11:42 AM
Hurry and write some more!
Dietrich Avatar
October 7, 2012 at 10:45 AM
This is very pretty. And it gives the melancholy mood that she asked for, Leonora! Sad and sweet this is!!
Liwayway Avatar
October 6, 2012 at 9:34 PM
wow!! superb write my dear friend..good luck in the contest..I'm sure i will be a winner! (^_^) Good day!!
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