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My Life

Life, Hi
How are you now
Oh me, not wonderful
For I have sadness and am weak
No that is not swell how shall we change this
Hold on, I may have an idea
Oh please oh please help me
My thoughts shall fix
My Life

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Randolph Hester Date: 1/15/2020 10:06:00 AM I think what is so good about this poem is how you constructed the first and second parts around the bilateral axis. The axis asks the changing question, then you interject the conversational "Hold on" to introduce the solution, again an insight using your thoughts and thinking to overcome the problem. You reveal both a young personal way of talking (Hold on) and really mature reasoning. Login to Reply

Constance La France Date: 12/17/2019 10:18:00 AM Atticus, I enjoyed reading your Ricktameter poem, not an easy form to do and you did it well, and welcome to Poetry Soup ! Login to Reply