My Life

Life, Hi
How are you now
Oh me, not wonderful
For I have sadness and am weak
No that is not swell how shall we change this
Hold on, I may have an idea
Oh please oh please help me
My thoughts shall fix
My Life

5th graderictameter

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Randolph Hester

January 15, 2020 at 10:06 AM

I think what is so good about this poem is how you constructed the first and second parts around the bilateral axis. The axis asks the changing question, then you interject the conversational "Hold on" to introduce the solution, again an insight using your thoughts and thinking to overcome the problem. You reveal both a young personal way of talking (Hold on) and really mature reasoning.