My Last Sunset

The triple sun set - what a sight,
And colours that I’d never seen,
My captors chirping their delight.
The triple sun set - what a sight,
Before the thirty moons of night.
My fellow captives: bones picked clean.
The triple sun set - what a sight,
And colours that I’d never seen.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Johnson Avatar
August 13, 2011 at 4:22 PM
Great entry. I haven't entered this one. Brain dead. We are all having trouble getting on and getting knocked off Jack. I am glad you keep trying and thank you for your kind comments. Love, Joyce
Sweetheart Avatar
August 13, 2011 at 1:10 PM
missing u Jack..and your great poetry my friend.. hope all is OK..luv...
Clark Avatar
August 9, 2011 at 2:07 PM
Nice Job Jack. Very creative
Sweetheart Avatar
August 8, 2011 at 3:05 PM
all u have to do to delete a poem that duplicated itself is ..go to your My Poems Page.. then scroll down and I think on the far right side is the delete button to remove ..but .. u will lose those comments Jack..so u best leave it alone.. some of mine duplicate at times..when the system is haywire luv.. luv from the beach ..hot hot today..
Onclaud Avatar
August 8, 2011 at 3:01 PM
oh, jack... so inviting.. for me?? :) huggs, nette
Foulk Avatar
August 8, 2011 at 2:37 PM
a very creative and well written piece of work.
Wesley Avatar
August 7, 2011 at 11:23 PM
This is so clever and the images are great - had to read it three times. Love it!
 Avatar
August 7, 2011 at 5:48 PM
Interesting use of rhyme and imagery. It feels like a sense of conflict giving the reader something to ponder. Best wishes with your writing. Karen
Sweetheart Avatar
August 7, 2011 at 3:20 PM
wow awesome Jack.. nice use of this form for this new contest..good luck luv.. nice and flowy ..
Devonshire Avatar
August 7, 2011 at 2:13 PM
Wow, we're thinking alike, Jack. I was going to write one with two suns. Frightening image of your fellow captives having their bones picked clean. Best wishes for success in Paula's contest! Love, Carolyn
Kendrick Avatar
August 7, 2011 at 2:01 PM
Interesting one..A triple sun set that was a sight..Enjoyed reading your creative work..Thanks for stopping by..I think that this work posted twice..Sara
Jones Avatar
August 7, 2011 at 1:15 PM
Ooooohhhh, I like! Nice work with a difficult form.
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