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June-12- 2025
My Inner Voice Told Me Poetry Contest
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After a hazardous trip from a far- off district, With drooping spirits and waning energy, I alighted at the station to catch the night train, My heart besieged by memories of a home, left behind. Like a drop in the ocean, I quickly merged with the buzzing crowd. In the blinking light of platform lamps, I saw a huge crowd- the young and the old, With baggage heaped on baggage Patiently waiting for the arrival of the train. Soon came the grating voice of the loudspeaker~ “The Rajadhani Express from Delhi to Trivandrum Scheduled to leave the station by 9 pm Would be late by one hour’!" I went cold at the thought of another long wait. In the sweltering heat of a summer night, Amid an undulating mass and deafening holler and roar It would be hell tied there for one more hour. The cry of babies fell in my ears like the squeal of piglets Some old women sat on haunches on the floor, Before some homemade food and snacks, Spread out on old newspapers and began munching. Youngsters busied themselves on their cell phones, Sending missives to their loved ones, Or chatting with their pals. I sat away secluded, inhaling the soot and the dust And looking vacantly at the curl of smoke From the grumpy looking man’s cigar, Sitting opposite to me lazily. When his red falcon eyes fell on me, My inner voice told me to move away, And instantly I walked into the ladies’ retiring room, Regretting once more, being a woman!
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Date: 6/12/2025 3:47:00 PM
Sometimes we need our inner voice to save us from struggles when we could no longer endure. I love how you incorporate your train experience to highlight the them of this poem. Excellent execution! I love this! To my Faves! Stay prolific!^__^ Jez
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Date: 6/12/2025 7:43:00 AM
Sigh, the emotive and vulnerable feeling that this poem gave me... ah! Such a profound and raw piece that describes those much unspoken yet largely felt emotions, especially that of being a woman in the prevailing mindsets of the society. The struggle is silent but still so loud! The journey which you've described here and especially that ending stanza, really moved me. "I sat away secluded, inhaling the soot and the dust And looking vacantly at the curl of smoke" Incredibly impactful! And that last line... sigh, it's so disheartening when some situations leave no option but for us to feel like that sometimes. Wonderfully knitted, dear poetess. Loved reading your words after a long time. Light and best wishes always ~
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