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My Heart Stopped Beating With Yours

Still in surgery, doctor sleeps.
Blood red eyes, twin keeps
vigil, exhausted and wide awake.
Revelation under plastic — my heartbreak!

Remember my heart stops beating,
when your conversation stops breathing.
I wring my arthritic hands.
Hourglass - I beg more sand!

Denied my kin and friend,
A perpetual kiss I send.

1/17/2018
Sponsor: Laura Loo
Contest: 10 lines, 5 words, Rhyme 2

Perpetual - everlasting, valid through all time, blooming through all seasons
(Merriam-Webster reference)

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Line Gauthier Date: 1/21/2018 9:15:00 PM Congrats on your well deserved win, Kim. Login to Reply Kim Rodrigues Date: 1/21/2018 9:21:00 PM Thanks Line!

Eve Roper Date: 1/20/2018 7:56:00 PM Congratulations on your win, Kim! Hugs Eve~`* Login to Reply Kim Rodrigues Date: 1/21/2018 7:15:00 AM Thanks, Eve!

Jan Allison Date: 1/20/2018 5:45:00 PM sch sad lines Kim, congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Kim Rodrigues Date: 1/21/2018 7:15:00 AM Thanks, Jan!

John Gondolf Date: 1/20/2018 11:31:00 AM Kim, back to say congrats on your win. John Login to Reply Kim Rodrigues Date: 1/21/2018 7:16:00 AM Thanks, John!

Beautiful Scars Date: 1/20/2018 11:12:00 AM wow so intensely beautiful. Loved every word, great rhythm and rhyme. You were one of the only ones who chose this theme (along with Eve) and you did a great job! congrats and thank you! :)-luloo Login to Reply Kim Rodrigues Date: 1/21/2018 7:17:00 AM Thank you, Luloo! Hard for me to reread. So close to my heart. <3 Kim

Line Gauthier Date: 1/17/2018 11:47:00 PM Very heartwarming poem. Very well done, Kim. Login to Reply Kim Rodrigues Date: 1/21/2018 7:18:00 AM Thank you, Line!

Susan Ashley Date: 1/17/2018 8:07:00 PM Oh so heartbreaking Kim. 'Hourglass - I beg more sand!' such strong emotional imagery depicted in your poignant poem. Beautiful flow to your lines in spite of the five word limit. Excellently written. Best wishes for a win.. ~Susan Login to Reply Kim Rodrigues Date: 1/21/2018 7:19:00 AM Mom misses her sister very much. Thank you, Susan!

John Gondolf Date: 1/17/2018 5:17:00 PM Nicely written, Kim, best of luck for a win. John Login to Reply Kim Rodrigues Date: 1/17/2018 5:18:00 PM Thanks, John!