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My Heart Bleeds

Abomination after abomination, sorrows and tears fill my eyes Seeing my children in despair, with hope and aspiration I remain. Infidelity, rotten my roots, my heart tumble and falls With the pain I continue to bear. I have filled their van with good produce and abundance rainfall; wash away their lands from stains and brighten their homes with the finest of lights. But still! I'm not seeing my way through. How does all this happen? I sometimes wonder. My hope is to see them flourish, prosper and live in unity. As I wait to pass on my final judgment.

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Darren White

Date: 3/6/2017 12:00:00 PM

Hello Jonathan, I sometimes tell this to other new poets here who wait eagerly for comments :) For people to discover your poems, it often needs a little effort from both sides. People here have to see firtst you are here before they can find your poems. The best way therefore is: read poems of other poets, and leave a comment to their work. That way they see you are here, can click your name and so find your poems in return. Second piece of advice is this: (to be continued)

Darren White
Date: 3/6/2017 1:31:00 PM

Of course, I fully understand, I was new once too!

Jonathan Smith
Date: 3/6/2017 1:02:00 PM

thanks for the advice Darren...I will look up to it... Just that this is a new experience...

Darren White
Date: 3/6/2017 12:01:00 PM

If people comment on your work, give them a reply, You will see that you will slowly but securely that way gain a reader public that will comment and converse with you. Good luck and welcome to PoetrySoup :)

Jonathan Smith

Date: 3/6/2017 7:29:00 AM

please comment to help me improve....

Darren White
Date: 3/6/2017 12:06:00 PM

A sad and painful poem about something that remains unsaid. Which is good. I like poems that aren't too obvious, and give me something to guess.