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My Foolish Heart

Impulsively, spontaneously I fell for you a man who knew nothing of my soul and realm you took my foolish heart and filled it with your greed then took it all away just like a pirate thief A man who knew nothing of my soul and realm gliding in you stole buried treasure from my box then took it all away just like a pirate thief despite the fact I was shut tighter than Fort Knox gliding in you stole buried treasure from my box promising me trinkets while ravaging my girth despite the fact I was shut tighter than Fort Knox I gave you a son and all that I once deemed worth promising me trinkets while ravaging my girth placating me with with every drunken ruse I gave you a son and all that I once deemed worth exploiting us like cheap cigars and wassailed booze placating me with every drunken ruse you took my foolish heart and filled it with your greed exploiting us like cheap cigars and wassailed booze impulsively, spontaneously I fell for you. Date: April 3, 2022 Sponsor L MILTON HANKINS Contest Name MY FOOLISH HEART

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Meghan Hutchings

Date: 4/7/2022 7:39:00 PM

Congratulations!!! Your poem is amazing and incredibly moving! For some reason, it brought tears to my eyes (in an empathetic way). Your writing is so powerful and your message seems to explode from the screen! Excellent job!! God bless and much love...Meghan!

James Marshall Goff

Date: 4/5/2022 10:43:00 AM

Congrats Vie! Ouch! but good therapy!

Terry Miller

Date: 4/5/2022 2:06:00 AM

Coming back to congratulate you I knew this wonderful poem would place.

Christuraj Alex

Date: 4/4/2022 10:54:00 PM

"drunken ruse", "cheap cigars and wassailed booze" - Wow! Congratulations!

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 4/4/2022 9:24:00 PM

Hmmmm … puts us in a pensive mood. Poignant, painful, piercing ~ congrats on your win, Mystic Rose

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 4/4/2022 5:25:00 PM

Alas, deceivers sometimes do succeed. A well crafted pantoum. Congratulations on your win. :)

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 4/4/2022 1:17:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. A wonderful yet sad write. Love your line, "impulsively, spontaneously I fell for you." That is the way it happens. Love this one. Life can be filled with hurt/pain. Have a great/blessed day writing away.......................

L Milton Hankins

Date: 4/4/2022 1:03:00 PM

Congratulations, Vie, on your placement in my "My Foolish Heart" Contest. I loved your poem. You did a fine job with the pantoum, too.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 4/4/2022 7:41:00 AM

Deeply sad write, Vie, difficult one to write about:)

Mystic Rose Rose
Date: 4/4/2022 12:20:00 PM

Thank you Jo, so many are in this predicament, :)

Terry Miller

Date: 4/4/2022 2:04:00 AM

A Great poem surely high up on the winner's list, so well written.

Mystic Rose Rose
Date: 4/4/2022 3:56:00 AM

Thank you dear Terry. Pantoums are very difficult for me to write, I haven't done many , this one took a long time, to construct, glad you enjoyed it

Eileen Manassian

Date: 4/3/2022 11:29:00 PM

Great write, my dear...though sad. Good use of form. I wish you every success in the contest. Thank you for your visit to my poem. Hope all is well with you...blessings. :)

Mystic Rose Rose
Date: 4/4/2022 3:55:00 AM

Good to hear from you today, may you be well and happy your whole life through

Vijay Pandit

Date: 4/3/2022 3:48:00 PM

Impulsive and spontaneous--they describe well the moods of heart, Vienna. All the best.

Mystic Rose Rose
Date: 4/4/2022 3:54:00 AM

Thank you Vijay, for your kind visit