Mystic Rose Rose Poet Pantoum

My Foolish Heart

Impulsively, spontaneously I fell for you  
a man who knew nothing of my soul and realm   
you took my foolish heart and filled it with your greed 
then took it all away just like a pirate thief

A man who knew nothing of my soul and realm 
gliding in you stole buried treasure from my box 
then took it all away just like a pirate thief
despite the fact I was shut tighter than Fort Knox 

gliding in you stole buried treasure from my box 
promising me trinkets while ravaging my girth 
despite the fact I was shut tighter than Fort Knox 
I gave you a son and all that I once deemed worth  

promising me trinkets while ravaging my girth 
placating me with with every drunken ruse 
I gave you a son and all that I once deemed worth  
exploiting us like cheap cigars and wassailed booze 

placating me with every drunken ruse 
you took my foolish heart and filled it with your greed 
exploiting us like cheap cigars and wassailed booze 
impulsively, spontaneously I fell for you. 

Date: April 3, 2022 
 Sponsor	L MILTON HANKINS
Contest Name	MY FOOLISH HEART

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Meghan Hutchings April 7, 2022 at 7:39 PM Congratulations!!! Your poem is amazing and incredibly moving! For some reason, it brought tears to my eyes (in an empathetic way). Your writing is so powerful and your message seems to explode from the screen! Excellent job!! God bless and much love...Meghan!

James Marshall Goff April 5, 2022 at 10:43 AM Congrats Vie! Ouch! but good therapy!

Terry Miller April 5, 2022 at 2:06 AM Coming back to congratulate you I knew this wonderful poem would place.

Christuraj Alex April 4, 2022 at 10:54 PM "drunken ruse", "cheap cigars and wassailed booze" - Wow! Congratulations!

Unseeking Seeker April 4, 2022 at 9:24 PM Hmmmm … puts us in a pensive mood. Poignant, painful, piercing ~ congrats on your win, Mystic Rose

Evelyn Judy Buehler April 4, 2022 at 5:25 PM Alas, deceivers sometimes do succeed. A well crafted pantoum. Congratulations on your win. :)

Paula Goldsmith April 4, 2022 at 1:17 PM Congratulations on your win. A wonderful yet sad write. Love your line, "impulsively, spontaneously I fell for you." That is the way it happens. Love this one. Life can be filled with hurt/pain. Have a great/blessed day writing away.......................

L Milton Hankins April 4, 2022 at 1:03 PM Congratulations, Vie, on your placement in my "My Foolish Heart" Contest. I loved your poem. You did a fine job with the pantoum, too.

Joanna Daniel April 4, 2022 at 7:41 AM Deeply sad write, Vie, difficult one to write about:) Mystic Rose Rose April 4, 2022 at 12:20 PM Thank you Jo, so many are in this predicament, :)

Terry Miller April 4, 2022 at 2:04 AM A Great poem surely high up on the winner's list, so well written. Mystic Rose Rose April 4, 2022 at 3:56 AM Thank you dear Terry. Pantoums are very difficult for me to write, I haven't done many , this one took a long time, to construct, glad you enjoyed it

Eileen Manassian April 3, 2022 at 11:29 PM Great write, my dear...though sad. Good use of form. I wish you every success in the contest. Thank you for your visit to my poem. Hope all is well with you...blessings. :) Mystic Rose Rose April 4, 2022 at 3:55 AM Good to hear from you today, may you be well and happy your whole life through

Vijay Pandit April 3, 2022 at 3:48 PM Impulsive and spontaneous--they describe well the moods of heart, Vienna. All the best. Mystic Rose Rose April 4, 2022 at 3:54 AM Thank you Vijay, for your kind visit