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My Five Senses

The pitch the peak of senses piqued each completely Let me see searching my memory biking down Laurier locking eyes with a hawk flying in the opposite lane is probably my most memorable favourite sight seen Epitome of sound if I went bird I couldn't pick only one so another favourite song the resting heartbeat of a well loved machine that deep rolling hum felt before seen the sound of love so not that different from a bird Smell's another hard sense to pin down puppy breath is one that'll have me rolling on the ground Can't touch this dancing rapt wrapped in a python feeling the weight of it's smooth cool mass feeling me never more embraced And then there's taste this one's the most fun Ripe Organic BC Bing Cherries shared with a girlfriend over Scrabble we lost track of each other the game everything taking tiny little bites enthralled with the pop of the skin the sweet swollen flesh scarlet oozing streaming down our... I looked at her and said what we both were thinking "I feel like a dirty old man." We finally got the cherry thing! 07/28/18 Viv Wigley's Five Senses Poetry Contest

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Date: 11/20/2019 8:26:00 AM
I love the concept knowing that you will write five descriptive poems Maureen, but turning the fifth sense into a separate poem, and then the spicy undertones with a twist; not knowing if you were going to go there... Absolutely brilliant!!!
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Jeff Connelly
Date: 11/20/2019 11:41:00 AM
That's sad to read Maureen. The cherries and your friend sound delicious haha.
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Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 11/20/2019 8:49:00 AM
Ha! I forgot about this one. A contest prompt. All true stories of course. Though an update, I can't handle motors anymore since my last bump on the head. And have not tasted the likes of those cherries since then.
Date: 8/21/2018 3:20:00 PM
Congrats on your winning work ..Way to go.. Sara
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Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 8/21/2018 4:49:00 PM
Thank you Sara! I may have had too much fun with this one ;) xomo!
Date: 8/16/2018 7:12:00 AM
Congratulations on your win! A unique and humorous poem about the five senses. Enjoyed reading the clever well thought-out verses. A fav for me! :)
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Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 8/16/2018 8:05:00 AM
Thank you so much Susan! Surprised myself with how well this came together ;) cheers lovely! xomo :))
Date: 8/15/2018 7:41:00 PM
Our senses are very uniquely imaged in your poem's Narrative presentation, Maureen! Congratulations on your Podium win! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 8/16/2018 8:02:00 AM
Thank you Sandra! This was such a fun contest to write for, going through memory sensory inventory ;) I had no idea how this one would be received, I'm tickled pink! A lovely day to you dear poetess, xomo
Date: 8/14/2018 3:58:00 PM
I am back and so happy to see this outstanding humorous poem in the top three Mo. I have never made his list either until now. He likes more meat (longer poems) than I can provide. Congratulations on being in the top three! I loved your entry and will fave it. : ) xxoo
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Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 8/14/2018 7:13:00 PM
Thank you so much Connie! But no! Not so! We do this to ourselves *sigh* Sieve for brains I did win a silver in his love letter to an animal contest with a... haiku~<3 xomo!
Date: 8/14/2018 12:13:00 PM
Well done Maureen... HIGH FIVE - Loved it. Congratulations!! :)
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Date: 8/14/2018 7:28:00 PM
High Five! Awesome Thank you! :) xomo
Date: 8/14/2018 10:11:00 AM
I love the way you 'categorized each of the senses, in such a unique and rich manner. This one left me smiling !! Loved the humor !!! Congrats to you, Maureen !!
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Date: 8/15/2018 7:13:00 AM
Thank you Carrie! Such a fun contest! Hugs :)) xomo!
Date: 8/14/2018 8:54:00 AM
I enjoyed this so much, Maureen! I love cherries! The dog’s breath had me chuckling! Congrats!! Fave!
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Date: 8/15/2018 7:15:00 AM
Thank you Kim! Gotta watch those puppies, trying to get a whiff, those tiny puppy teeth hurt the nose ;) Hugs! xomo
Date: 8/6/2018 2:46:00 AM
Great senses, Kai
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Date: 8/12/2018 9:20:00 PM
Thank you!! :) xomo
Date: 8/1/2018 10:39:00 AM
Very entertaining and descriptive, Maureen! Janice
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Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 8/1/2018 1:30:00 PM
Thank you Janice! This contest a treat to write for :)) xomo!
Date: 8/1/2018 10:07:00 AM
I think this is wonderful Maureen, I sit looking a cloudless sky, smelling the country air, feeling the warm sun rays on my muscular body, listening to the birds singing, eating ripe watermelon, reading this excellent poetry, life is so good. Well written my friend. :))
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Date: 8/1/2018 9:33:00 PM
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Date: 8/1/2018 3:02:00 PM
Fantasy can’t fool you!
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Date: 8/1/2018 1:29:00 PM
Mmmm muscles ;) what were you saying? xomo
Date: 7/30/2018 3:23:00 PM
Maureen, you dirty old......well anyway this is a masterful display of your wondrous word mania. Way to take the theme to new heights(and possible depths). I'll be laughing every time I think about that last line....
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Date: 7/30/2018 3:49:00 PM
Giggles ;) I'll take that. I did waver on posting this one, but figure there's far more explicit stuff posted here, and this is after all my truth. I like "word mania" ;D Thank you! And laugh on, that happened over a decade ago and it still cracks me up. xomo!
Date: 7/30/2018 2:18:00 PM
Tartest, tangiest cherries ever bled, I mean read. :) gw
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Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 7/30/2018 2:26:00 PM
LOL! Nah, the sweetest cherries eaten by the tartiest of friends! ;p xomo!
Date: 7/30/2018 2:17:00 PM
Tartest cherries ever bled, I mean read. :) gw
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Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 7/30/2018 2:27:00 PM
Lol...
Date: 7/30/2018 1:30:00 PM
Beautiful narrative, it feels like you have turned your soul onto its side and poured her onto the paper. I approve heartily of course!
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Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 7/30/2018 2:29:00 PM
Thank you Caren! This one is a little scary honest ;) wasn't sure I'd be getting any comments at all <3 xomo!
Date: 7/30/2018 12:03:00 AM
that is really putting it out there like it is i love it, and thank you for your kind words one of these days i'll learn how to respond to comments left, until then this is the only way i know how, once again thank you,and i truly enjoyed this poem....
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Date: 7/30/2018 6:49:00 AM
Yeah, I do do that ;) You are so welcome! Thank You! Took me a little while figure that out too, observant only when it comes to bugs n' birds apparently. Cheer! xomo
Date: 7/29/2018 11:12:00 PM
Haha...you have a magnificent imagination that thrills with humor Mo. I loved this write and I will bet Viv will too! : )
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Date: 7/30/2018 6:41:00 AM
Tee hee hee ;) every word is true! Except "scarlet" poetic liscence, cherry red too obvious lol! I've never won a Wigley, there's always a first ;p Thank you so much Connie! xomo <3
Date: 7/29/2018 4:51:00 PM
wow, what an interesting ending!! Very creative take on this challenge theme!
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Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 7/29/2018 8:07:00 PM
Thank you Andrea, my muse really went for it, I'm delighted and surprised. ;) xomo!
Date: 7/29/2018 12:54:00 PM
Delightful way to display the five senses dearest, Maureen! A joy to read! Good luck!
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Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 7/29/2018 8:14:00 PM
Thank you sweet D! Gotta say that was my single most incredible moment on a bike, the hawk was using traffic to surprise attack the sparrows! xomo
Date: 7/29/2018 12:23:00 PM
dealt nicely with five senses. Love.
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Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 7/29/2018 8:24:00 PM
Thank you Anisha <3 xomo

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