Cory Long Poet Couplet

My First Sin

"Each experience is locked within my heart and only I hold the key..."
that will open the doors of my soul for you to see. 

It was a cold October night and my parents were in a fight.
you and I we were tight.

I met you beneath the willow tree 
where you said you'd be.

Nervous, anxious and wanting to run
I looked into your eyes and I was done.

Sitting there on that hill
everything was still.

My heart was racing
and my palms were shaking.

You leaned in 
and that was the night of my first sin.

We sat close and snuggled all night
with the moon shining bright.

As puppy love showed its face
you got to first base.

8-20-2011
A Fragment of Life 
Cory long

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Andrea Dietrich August 28, 2011 at 1:13 AM hahaha. I was wondering if you really sinned and then got to the cute ending. This is adorable. Congratulations.

Mohammad Yamin August 27, 2011 at 8:48 PM An awesome poem -a winner -very expressive. I am charmed. I, however, searched where the sin is and couldn't find it. Thanks also for your encouraging comments on my poem Loveless Life. -Mohammad

Lee Ramage August 27, 2011 at 7:05 PM Oh, I remember it the times well. Nicely done. Lee

Constance La France August 26, 2011 at 5:11 PM Congratulations Cory on your 2nd place win in my contest with this wonderful poem~~

Debbie Guzzi August 26, 2011 at 5:02 PM Very endearing! such a nice memory and surely no sin ;) Congrad's Light & Love

Robert Johnson August 25, 2011 at 6:37 PM And now you can forgive yourself. We all need our hearts off the shelf. And in the early dawn of life. First base is how you get home to your wife.

Gwendolen Song August 25, 2011 at 5:21 PM Awwwwwww, Cory. So your first sin was ACTUALLY sneaking out of the house!? So tender an great couplets to boot! Gwendolen

Jack Horne August 25, 2011 at 4:56 PM Many congrats to you, Cory : )

Natalie The Rogue Rhymer August 25, 2011 at 4:27 PM Love this Cory-really tells the story well. Impressive!

Tony Lane August 25, 2011 at 2:42 PM Great win! Good for you!! Tony

Carol Sunshine Brown August 25, 2011 at 2:15 PM Congratulations on your well deserved placement in Constance's "A Fragment of Life" contest Cory. Love, Carol

Dan Kearley August 25, 2011 at 1:58 PM Congrats on your win! Very sweet.

Paul Beadnall August 25, 2011 at 12:16 PM Congrats on your indepth touching winner,Cory blessings Paul

Sara Kendrick August 25, 2011 at 12:10 PM Congrats on your win in this great contest..Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart August 25, 2011 at 11:00 AM congrats cory on a special second place win with this dynamic poetry my friend.. enjoy luv..

Joyce Johnson August 25, 2011 at 10:39 AM Congratualtions on your high win. Joyce

Bob Quigley August 25, 2011 at 10:32 AM Congratulations on your win Cory

Jodie Williams August 25, 2011 at 10:02 AM Congratultions on your worthy win Cory, with this beautiful write

David Williams August 25, 2011 at 9:39 AM hey Cory congrats on your win, great poem David

Dinda Minardi August 21, 2011 at 11:44 AM A beautiful first sin, Cory. I like this very much.

Nette Onclaud August 21, 2011 at 6:01 AM what a divine moment sealed with your sweet, breataking lines, cory... winning wishes..;) huggs, nette Nette Onclaud August 21, 2011 at 6:02 AM *breathtaking*