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My First Poem

(When got bedridden for months with a debilitating disease in 2007, 
to escape from depression, I turned to poetry)


in pits of despair
I lay, finding all doors shut.
a sad impaired bird~
with broken wings wished to fly
into sky, breaking all chains.

a feat so daring
my mind urged me to just try
I started scribbling~
took off on fancy’s light wings.
found words dancing on paper.

gloom gave way to hope
rhyme and sweet rhythm came in pair
thoughts turned poetic~
they took the form of clean verse
thus, my first poem was born

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Andrea Dietrich Date: 12/15/2024 12:51:00 PM Back with my congrats on your heartfelt set Login to Reply

Christuraj Alex Date: 12/14/2024 11:32:00 PM Scribbling when "finding all doors shut", your poetry has found vast horizons. Congratulations! Login to Reply

Michael Tor Date: 12/9/2024 5:49:00 PM You didn't give up and your Poetry was born through your hardship that you overcame and realized you had a talent for writing. Heartfelt piece Valsa. Glad you are an over comer. God bless. Login to Reply

Yann Rolland Date: 12/9/2024 5:38:00 PM so touching story and poem, full of sensitivity best wishes poet Login to Reply

Joe Maverick Date: 12/9/2024 1:10:00 PM Good to read of your success Valsa.' Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 12/8/2024 8:58:00 PM Ahhh very very good set of tanka on birth of your poetry, Valsa Login to Reply

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 12/8/2024 11:01:00 AM - From depression ... starting to listen to your soul's song, Valsa - filling you with new ideas to much encouragement and joy :) - Lovely :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs Login to Reply

Ink Empress Date: 12/8/2024 10:01:00 AM Dear sweet valsa, im so sorry you’ve had to endure such a situation, being bedridden is no fun, and ive seen loved ones bedridden and how poetry helped them too, so your story here youv written about in the form of tanka in such a poetic manner , i truly can empathize with, and i must say you are a natural with words! And i still would love to also read your published books too. You have a very seamless way of expressing and that makes your poetry an easy read. Best wishes in the contest. Sending you light always Login to Reply

Jay Narain Date: 12/8/2024 9:52:00 AM Nice start amidst adversity. Login to Reply

Sotto Poet Date: 12/8/2024 8:57:00 AM You articulate your path effectively through this. Numerous others will resonate with your experience, not solely myself. I am pleased that you have regenerated and are now a member of this family. You have more cause to celebrate than to lament. Particularly given that you are currently one of the most esteemed artists on this platform. Every endeavor has a beginning, dear Valsa. Best wishes for the contest. Login to Reply

Paula Goldsmith Date: 12/8/2024 7:59:00 AM Your "My First Poem" write is lovely. Something great came from something bad. You became a wonderful poet. Hooray!!!  "Good Luck" Blessings........... Login to Reply

Silent One Date: 12/8/2024 5:32:00 AM Awww you have been through a similar journey to me, I started writing again after chemo messed up my brain, and to help it function, I started writing again, inspired by Rumi... Who helped me heal and fall in love with poetry again.. You describe your journey really welll through this from.. Many will relate to your journey not jut me.. I am happy you have recovered and are part of this community.. Your first tanka is my favourite.. Best of luck in the contest dear poet.. Login to Reply Valsa George Date: 12/8/2024 8:29:00 AM Thank you so much for your sweet comment, dear Silent One. I am so sorry to hear that you had to undergo chemo. From a fall, there will be a rise! Let us believe that. As we sail through adverse currents, there will come someone as a savior. In your case Rumi came to inspire you, now you have grown almost to the stature of Rumi. So, leave aside your gloom and be thankful. There is greater reason for you to rejoice than grieve.