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*Image from my family collection. My First Hour
*Mom's hospital bed/private room There straight quite yond, mom's free passage where blooms dyed green, tied like their leaves fair and smooth, our cloudless ceiling share the calm, all creatures outside. *Lineage sorted Pare down the clock, the hour has turned heir flanked, poor lamb, by who came first square knows naught, the angst, to be last fare advanced; one-thirty a.m. *Maternity Ward Ne'er will be, the call for kindling their task met and was set to go care, a pretense all hearts needed err, a cost most try to forget. *Our beginning Stare, a phase of life unconcerned they're quaint and fresh, trades look of glee hair dangled free, blend reddish-brown bare one's head, naught bald but unmeshed. *Dad Share those idle hands for a while rare times be, the grand breadwinner chair uneased released one's venture Bear satisfied, one's heart pumps free. *Actual Labor Day ended Blare distant sonance, the hour bring flare fleets nigh, so wake naught slept sky swear Heaven's gift wields the best plan spare the rod ... in time you'll know why. *Blissful Hawaiian solace Air gasp bristled lungs, constants smiles dare frisks prod tum, in lieu of toys pair mother and son blessed premier prayer ... mom for her son ... to God. 2021 August 18 *1st Place* A BRIAN STRAND you choose ~~Brian Strand: Judged 2021 August 18

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Date: 8/19/2021 12:27:00 PM
Your writing is brimming with inventiveness. William! I am completely astonished by the scope of your creative production. It motivates me to become a better poet. This format is fantastic, and your words weigh an injunction.
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Date: 8/19/2021 10:57:00 PM
Busy from poetry, just a short visit after a long day. I am very well pleased to view your indelible words of ingenuity and caring insights my friend, and I am so overwhelmed by the rareness of this expressed generosity. Walk with Grace always, Aloha!
Date: 8/18/2021 11:20:00 AM
Your creativity just overflows from your lines William! I am always amazed at the breadth and depth of your writing - poetic inspiration. Love this format. These words move with the power of the imperative! Congratulations and blessings my friend. Aloha joy to you!
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Date: 8/18/2021 1:29:00 PM
I must say, Sam, that I am -- without a doubt -- a true admirer of your intuitive summations for they are the foundation and source bearing uplifting sustenance, whereby, my ink never runs dry, peace and joy always my friend, Aloha!

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