Cory Long Poet Narrative

My First Date

My first date was when I was 14.
He was older then me.
We went for a walk on the beach. 
That took us  back to  the car.
Things were going great until there was a knock.
That is when it all started to fall apart.
Looking up like a deer in the headlights.
As he suggested we leave for the night.
Meeting up with some friends
never would have expected my brother there.
Now the date was officially done 
my brother is who took me home.


Cory long
My first date contest 
carol brown

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Judy Konos July 21, 2011 at 6:03 AM A great memory that you would not have had! Congratulations on your BIG WIN TWICE

Sidney Hall Mad Poet July 16, 2011 at 3:40 PM It was over before it began :-( Contratz on your 1st place.

Black Eyed Susan July 16, 2011 at 1:20 PM what a disappointing ending for you! congratulations on your win :)

Andrea Dietrich July 16, 2011 at 7:30 AM Congratulations on your top spot, Cory. I had my first kiss at age 14 too with an "older guy!" I think it is quite memorable and hopefully your first date was still a good one despite your bro!

Debbie Guzzi July 16, 2011 at 4:58 AM Good brother! So nice to see you in first place I couldn't remember my first date? Light & Love

Debbie Guzzi July 16, 2011 at 4:58 AM Good brother! So nice to see you in first place I couldn't remember my first date? Light & Love

Joyce Johnson July 15, 2011 at 4:42 PM Good for your brother. I had four older one watching our for me. Congratulations Cory. Love, Joyce

Dr.Ram Mehta July 15, 2011 at 3:30 PM My congratulations on the first place win in the contest, Cory

Beatrice Boyle July 15, 2011 at 2:30 PM Congrats Cory on your win in this contest. Tell me...were you watching the "submarine races" as we did in N.J. lol Bea Cory Long July 15, 2011 at 2:41 PM yeah that and more lol

Linda-Marie Sweetheart July 15, 2011 at 1:42 PM congrats cory on your super first place win with this dynamic delight my friend.. awesome as u luv..

Carol Sunshine Brown July 15, 2011 at 12:39 PM Congratulations on your placement in my contest and thank you for supporting my contest Cory. Love, Carol

Don Johnson June 28, 2011 at 8:30 PM Brother saved the day perhaps, but did ya wanna get away.? Lifes little hot adventures. luck 4 the contest little mate, Don

Carol Sunshine Brown June 28, 2011 at 10:42 AM Thank you it is in the list now Cory. Love, Carol

Lisa Cooper June 28, 2011 at 10:07 AM great pen lol yeah brothers can be such a bore lol

Carol Eastman June 28, 2011 at 8:15 AM Surprise ending. Loved it.

Carol Sunshine Brown June 28, 2011 at 6:30 AM Cor,y Please go back and check. Did you forget to hit submit? Your poem is not in my list . Pleaes resubmit. Love, Carol

Carol Sunshine Brown June 28, 2011 at 5:47 AM Thank you for supporting my contest Cory. Love, Carol

Dr.Ram Mehta June 27, 2011 at 6:15 PM Very interesting date, Cory

Caryl Muzzey June 27, 2011 at 6:15 PM A wonderful write Cory, you also had a wonderful brother. Best to you in the contest, I enjoyed the read. Caryl