My Eyes

my eyes are so dark
 and the sun in my sky dead
 So my soul is blind
 but tomorrow a morn star
 shall take a way the night

hopetanka

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Dr.Ram Mehta

February 25, 2011 at 6:09 PM

Congratulations on the fourth place win in the contest of Constance, Honesty

Carol Sunshine Brown

February 25, 2011 at 9:57 AM

Congratulations on your win Honesty, in Debbie's contest. Love, Carol

Barbara Gorelick

February 24, 2011 at 4:53 PM

this is so beautiful...so very beautiful. congrats on your win. BG

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

February 24, 2011 at 7:01 AM

Congrats HONESTY my friend on your great big win in the Japanese contest luv.. a super cool write.. enjoy with luv..

Nette Onclaud

February 24, 2011 at 12:45 AM

soulful write, honesty.. CONGRATS to you :) huggs, nette

Andrea Dietrich

February 23, 2011 at 9:45 PM

wow, I am glad you won so that I was able to know you had this poem here. Congratulations. I really like this!

Dr Hitendra Mehta

February 23, 2011 at 9:07 PM

Many congrats Honesty on clinching big win in Debbie's contest. Luv & Best wishes - Hitendra Mehta

Debbie Guzzi

February 23, 2011 at 1:22 PM

I could really see this being a lovers reply of grief and hope for tomorow. Congrad's on your big win. Light & Love

Kash Poet

February 23, 2011 at 10:33 AM

Emotional write here,Honesty.Congrats on your big win!---kashinath

Debbie Guzzi

February 21, 2011 at 9:51 AM

Hi there my friend thanks for the entry, I could see how a lover could reply this to a haiku..showing that they are longing and missing the other and waiting to see them again...please join the 5 lines no space please/ no indent..title ---my eyes are so dark..Light & Love

De R

November 11, 2010 at 12:39 AM

A heartfelt poem, Honesty:) Hugs, Emilia

Cecil Hickman

November 9, 2010 at 4:15 PM

a very deep emotional piece with well chosen words,,Blessings..Cecil

Vicki Acquah

November 9, 2010 at 12:58 PM

Is experimenting a bad thing ?did you like it was it funny.comment? This one I like,because it it explains a rather dead comment. But according to you there is hope. Sometime moving outside of the box stirs the soul.

Fabiyas M V

November 9, 2010 at 5:44 AM

very optimistic powerful write,honesty.i enjoyed it.

Chad Wood

November 8, 2010 at 10:22 AM

Good imagery in this one :) and THANK you for checking my work out!

Dr.Ram Mehta

November 8, 2010 at 9:47 AM

Nice write with fine images, Honesty

Caroline Cécile Delacroix

November 8, 2010 at 9:36 AM

Truly well written, leaving the reader thinking and also with hope. That's excellent! Thanks for sharing and thank you for your kind comment on my latest. Caroline.