My Dream Within A Dream

There are dreams, unsought dreams, dreams fulfilled;
Why cherry pick - adventure is knocking at the door.
—by Poet

My Dream Within A Dream

they marched back into my life
          was this the afterlife
the family of his wife
     this was not his fantasy life
     but that was a smile on his wife

     to go forth from safe place called home
     across ocean’s deep, I did roam
          a dream to kick up foam
     make a family of our own
be fruitful with seeds sown
          and to grow a backbone
     but still I missed my mom and dad
before I had writing pad
     a Navy adventure I had
          unsought dream that I had

putting your hand in God’s hand
hear music, strike up the band
     where you put your feet is God’s land
          a steady flow of dreams
He heard my heart song, it seems
     long time before that, poetry -
          a window, by the sea
wearing a Renaissance blouse
          before I had a spouse
     for true blue lit up my lighthouse
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La France Avatar
October 2, 2025 at 3:43 AM
Kim, congratulations on your win in my Dream Within A Dream contest, judged 09/29. Your poem is wonderful and I like the quote, Constance
Rodrigues Avatar
October 2, 2025 at 5:32 AM
Big hugs ~ thank you, Constance!
Kendrick Avatar
October 1, 2025 at 8:28 AM
Creative winning work. Way to go. Congratulations on being on the winners' list. Sara K
Rodrigues Avatar
October 1, 2025 at 12:01 PM
Thank you, Sara!
Guptar Avatar
September 29, 2025 at 1:12 PM
Congratulations, poet friend, on your high placement in this poem with a lovely poem, which brightly paints dreams and feelings seeming to stem from your real life. Would that adventure be somewhere in the Pacific Islands! Your trust in Divine hands is appreciated and every cloud has a silver lining. In this case, it turned out to be poetry. Until next time, wish you a cheerful smiling day.
Rodrigues Avatar
September 29, 2025 at 3:55 PM
Yes, this is based on real life. I was in the Navy and lived on Oahu for three years :) Thank you for your lovely comment, my friend!
Goldsmith Avatar
September 29, 2025 at 9:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful write and quote. I love the sea. Have a fun day with your win as you go writing away.........
Rodrigues Avatar
September 29, 2025 at 3:55 PM
Thank you, sweet lady!
Hind Avatar
September 11, 2025 at 4:16 PM
A gorgeous write, Kim - could feel your adventure go through my spirit.
Rodrigues Avatar
September 29, 2025 at 5:37 AM
Thank you so much! Do you know how much you make my day? :)
Freie Avatar
September 9, 2025 at 10:05 AM
Kim Darlin', I had my Navy adventure too. I followed in my Pop's footsteps and sailed the salty seas. Sometimes I wish I was still out there. If you can't find inspiration under a sea of stars while riding a sea of wonder, then face it, inspiration must not be in your vocabulary.
Rodrigues Avatar
September 9, 2025 at 11:32 AM
Randy, dear friend, love your comment, made me smile! My Dad was a submariner and my son too! My daughters had no interest. I love the sea! <3
George Avatar
September 8, 2025 at 9:41 PM
"across ocean’s deep, I did roam a dream to kick up foam make a family of our own be fruitful with seeds sown and to grow a backbone"..... 'a dream to kick up foam' - Love this. This is everyone's dream. Beautifully penned. All the Best dear Kim.
Rodrigues Avatar
September 9, 2025 at 11:33 AM
Thank you so kindly! Blessings, dear Valsa! :)
Etgen-Baker Avatar
September 8, 2025 at 5:33 PM
I admire the unique physical structure of this poem as well as the touch of nostalgia. Especially liked: Renaissance blouse before I had a spouse best wishes with this entry in the contest, hugs, Sara
Rodrigues Avatar
September 8, 2025 at 6:52 PM
Thank you, Sarah! I’m glad you liked that part. Thank you for stopping in often.
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