My Dappled Brain

here comes the rain pounding on my dappled brain,
  so sodden wet, clattering sounds between my ears.
    the plip and plop water torture, day after Winter day.
i might go insane with sure gong, gray kettle of tears.

the pitter and patter as if children making faces at the glass.
  a searing sound that even the molding oaks are tired of.
    the slippery sludge of mudding earth mixed in with leaves,
cleave like skeletal fingers fraught with fearful flood from above.

oh these breaking clay skies, colorless sans lightning,
  no exciting zigzag wag nor snowball throwing hail.
    not requesting a storm, rather, i’d like to see sunflowers
and dandelions raining seeds, a blue sky with sails.

1/23/2020

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Date: 1/24/2020 8:55:00 AM
This is an amazing write Kim - very masterful and beautifully crafted. Blessings, Jennifer.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/24/2020 8:58:00 AM
Thank you, Jennifer!
Date: 1/23/2020 8:54:00 PM
AWESOME, Kim! Janice
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/23/2020 11:54:00 PM
Thank you, Janice!
Date: 1/23/2020 6:42:00 PM
Wow Kim, great write. An original take on rain and S2 is magic. Great poeming.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/23/2020 11:54:00 PM
Thank you, Eric!
Date: 1/23/2020 4:46:00 PM
Kim, A nice capture of going stir crazy on a rainy day. I like your alliterations ("slippery sludge" and "fingers fraught with fearful flood") and nearby rhymes ("leaves cleave" and "zigzag wag") and repurposing rain in "dandelions raining seeds". So much to love! Hugs ~ John
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/23/2020 6:27:00 PM
Thank you so very much! I appreciate your comment! Hugs...Kim
Date: 1/23/2020 12:48:00 PM
We finally see the sun here after several dreary days of rain. Your poem says exactly what I had been thinking. :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/23/2020 6:28:00 PM
Yes!
Date: 1/23/2020 11:57:00 AM
Oh my such a vivid depiction of rainy weather that I ...was soaked to the bone by the time I finish reading! hahaha. Excellent writing dear, Kim!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/23/2020 6:28:00 PM
Holding an umbrella over your head :)
Date: 1/23/2020 11:35:00 AM
Your imagery of spring and winter, a lively contrast, my friend.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/23/2020 11:45:00 AM
Thank you <3
Date: 1/23/2020 10:03:00 AM
Wouldn't we all, Kim. Bur weather is what it is and we can do nothing to change it – and how glad I am given what humans have done already with the environment! Marie Antoinette was Austrian by birth.Tradition says she introduce the croissant to the french court and french bakers improved it to everyone's delight. Thank you for stopping by./ M
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/23/2020 10:12:00 AM
Thank you for your comment! Always appreciate your visits, feel honored!
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