Black Eyed Susan Poet Rondeau

My Cotton Sheets

this is actually a rondolet, a shortened form of rondeau, which does not have its own category on p.s.


My cotton sheets
Like a blue ocean on my bed
My cotton sheets
Where you and I used to retreat
Before I went off of my meds,
Before your blood spattered them red
My cotton sheets


9/19/11

Received 1st place in Nette's "Weave a Rondelet" contest

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Kabuteng P.Ink K. September 30, 2011 at 11:55 AM Yikes! What a twist in the end and I really like it :D! Way to go for bagging 1st prize in this one, Susan! ^_^

Andrea Dietrich September 27, 2011 at 12:42 AM did you get inspired yet for the church poem? I googled a bunch of church pictures by the sea and it just got me more confused. Did you know there is an actual RELIGIon called Church by the Sea??

Andrea Dietrich September 27, 2011 at 12:41 AM wowie, I had not noticed. YOu DID place at the top with it.Just as I predicted. I am glad Nette got THIS one right. WHEEEEE.

Nancy Jones September 25, 2011 at 6:50 PM Oh, wow.. ya got me! Nice twist, lol. Great write, Susan and congrats! Happy day~N

Carol Sunshine Brown September 24, 2011 at 5:50 PM Congratulations on your win with your Weave A Rondelet poem Susan. Love, Carol

Dr.Ram Mehta September 23, 2011 at 7:30 AM Congratulations on the win in the contest of nette, Susan

Margaret Foster September 23, 2011 at 5:02 AM Congrats Susan, not quite what I was expecting after the fourth line... Good twist.. cheers Margaret

Gwendolen Song September 22, 2011 at 9:45 PM Susan....it looks like cotton almost ruled the day.. ha ha. Very beautiful rondeau. It seems like an emotional release for whomever the owner of the cotton sheets were. The title looks solid. I saw you were looking for help on the title earlier....I like it bc it is a simple poignant write. Congrats on this golden medal win!! Hugs, Gwendolen

John Freeman September 22, 2011 at 7:26 PM A pleasure to see Susan Burch in the tops spot. Worthy poem sis. Agape, Moses

Linda-Marie Sweetheart September 22, 2011 at 5:32 PM Congrats Susan on a great first place win luv...

Jslambert Mister Roboto September 21, 2011 at 8:55 PM good luck in this contest. You gotta good one here!

Andrea Dietrich September 20, 2011 at 1:09 AM oohhlalalala. a murder story in a ronndelet. This is so awesome. If this were in a contest of MINE, it would be way up at the top. I just love this!!

Sara Kendrick September 19, 2011 at 7:09 PM Very scary..Reminds me of a program on TV called snapped..Good luck in the contest with this alluring story..Reads like a winner..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Sara

John Smith September 19, 2011 at 2:12 PM Ha, ha! You are psycho. You are joking, right? I love cotton sheets, but they gotta be clean. Title it 'Bloody Sheets.'

Joseph Osita September 19, 2011 at 12:27 PM This is a nicely written Rondeau. So lovely. Why do you want to change the title? It is ok with me. Have a wonderful day, susan

Black Eyed Susan September 19, 2011 at 9:55 AM any title ideas welcomed - i couldn't think of a good one!