Darlene Gifford Poet Rhyme

My Book of Trees

A golden rain tree caught my eye,
in a book of trees I planned to buy.
I imagined when summer time came,
floating yellow flower petals,
c
   a
     s
       c
         a
            d
              I
                n
                  g
down like rain.
I know I have no yard to see,
my flowering yellow clustered tree.
But still my book of trees is there,
and falling petals jewel my hair.

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Richard Lamoureux September 18, 2014 at 10:00 AM Jewel still has two sylables, consider "drape". Either way I love what you have done with this piece. Darlene Gifford September 18, 2014 at 11:20 AM I'm sorry, but "drape" does nothing for my hair. I did put "crown" there temporarily, but liked "jewel" better. It adds sparkle to my hair. I only hear one syllable in jewel, unless I say it slowly. Of course, in real life, nothing will add sparkle to my gray hair! Thanks for your input. :)

Gordon Mcconnell September 17, 2014 at 1:02 PM great write Darlene, love your cascading fall, real impressive. have blessed day, Gordon Darlene Gifford September 17, 2014 at 3:42 PM Thank you, Gordon. I hope all is well with you. I heard something on TV about Scotland voting to break away from UK? I'll have to talk to you sometimes what that is all about? Blessings! Darlene

Maurice Yvonne September 16, 2014 at 5:49 PM You were not on my list of fav poets. So now you are. Darlene Gifford September 16, 2014 at 7:36 PM I am so honored! Thank you, Maurice

Maurice Yvonne September 16, 2014 at 5:48 PM I have to agree with everyone else this poem is excellent. I will add you to my list of fav poets if I have not already.

Roy Jerden September 16, 2014 at 11:45 AM Excellent! I like the use of space and the rhyme. The meter is spot on except for the last line. If you can replace "adorn" with a single syllable word, I think it will flow better. Cheers, Roy Darlene Gifford September 16, 2014 at 11:57 AM Aha! A teaching moment. I love it! Thanks Roy (good name, my fathers...now in heaven) I will definitely look into it. I like the word adorn, but perhaps I can like a better one. :)