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My Book of Trees

A golden rain tree caught my eye,
in a book of trees I planned to buy.
I imagined when summer time came,
floating yellow flower petals,
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   a
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            d
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down like rain.
I know I have no yard to see,
my flowering yellow clustered tree.
But still my book of trees is there,
and falling petals jewel my hair.

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/18/2014 10:00:00 AM

Jewel still has two sylables, consider "drape". Either way I love what you have done with this piece.

Darlene Gifford
Date: 9/18/2014 11:20:00 AM

I'm sorry, but "drape" does nothing for my hair. I did put "crown" there temporarily, but liked "jewel" better. It adds sparkle to my hair. I only hear one syllable in jewel, unless I say it slowly. Of course, in real life, nothing will add sparkle to my gray hair! Thanks for your input. :)

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 9/17/2014 1:02:00 PM

great write Darlene, love your cascading fall, real impressive. have blessed day, Gordon

Darlene Gifford
Date: 9/17/2014 3:42:00 PM

Thank you, Gordon. I hope all is well with you. I heard something on TV about Scotland voting to break away from UK? I'll have to talk to you sometimes what that is all about? Blessings! Darlene

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/16/2014 5:49:00 PM

You were not on my list of fav poets. So now you are.

Darlene Gifford
Date: 9/16/2014 7:36:00 PM

I am so honored! Thank you, Maurice

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/16/2014 5:48:00 PM

I have to agree with everyone else this poem is excellent. I will add you to my list of fav poets if I have not already.

Roy Jerden

Date: 9/16/2014 11:45:00 AM

Excellent! I like the use of space and the rhyme. The meter is spot on except for the last line. If you can replace "adorn" with a single syllable word, I think it will flow better. Cheers, Roy

Darlene Gifford
Date: 9/16/2014 11:57:00 AM

Aha! A teaching moment. I love it! Thanks Roy (good name, my fathers...now in heaven) I will definitely look into it. I like the word adorn, but perhaps I can like a better one. :)