Patri Venkata Ramana Poet Tetractys

My Beloved

Hours
                                          with you
                                         persistent
                                   in my deep heart
                         until I feel my life ebbing away

                        If cycle of time stops revolution
                                      die peacefully
                                   swapping thoughts
                                           in thy
                                            eyes


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Double Tetractys 8 Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Eve Roper 
A Double Tetractys written as: 
1, 2, 3, 4, 10, 10, 4, 3, 2, 1
Date: 20-08-2021.

Place : 1st

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Sam Kauffman September 14, 2021 at 11:07 AM So delicate and wistfully romantic like the subtle passing of time Patri. Congratulations for your win. Patri Venkata Ramana September 25, 2021 at 9:21 AM Thanks a lot for the compliments.

Eve Roper September 9, 2021 at 6:12 PM Patri, congratulations on your win. Your verse had great imagery, flow, and a split for the second stanza. Hugs Eve Patri Venkata Ramana September 25, 2021 at 9:21 AM Thank you so much for the compliments.

Constance La France August 20, 2021 at 1:42 PM Patri, beautifully penned, I like your poem a lot, best of luck in the contest ~ Constance Patri Venkata Ramana August 20, 2021 at 10:29 PM Glad to receive your compliments. Thanks a lot for the encouragement.