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My 2023: Ugh

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Poetic Form: Sijo
Inspired: 2024 January 01
Image: N/A

A house in motion near an ocean ... cautious one to leave. A highland house owned by time affects one ... wakes to a place in whites. A house boarded by healed one ... one's beach house welcomes New Year.

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 1/9/2024 9:22:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful write. Have a blessed day writing away................

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/9/2024 10:43:00 AM

Thank you so much, Paula, and enjoy, Aloha, William

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/8/2024 11:29:00 AM

ahhh, so this must have been in Hawaii. thanks for entering my contest, Hilo. Let's hope for a better year in 2024. (Which house was yours in the poem?)

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/8/2024 12:00:00 PM

Both, the townhouse/beach house is my bayfront home (read my poem 'SWOOSH', to get my meaning), and the mountain house/family get-a-way, I inherited wholly after my sister passed (the last of my family). It sits mid-isle where realtor dad met the client's (60% interest) being in Kona (opposite Hilo) side of the isle. THANKS, Andrea. Aloha, William

Hiya Sharma

Date: 1/3/2024 8:05:00 PM

This is a very deep sijo, dear William. 2023 wasn't quite a fair year for me, or so to say, it was one of the most chaotic and gloomy ones.. You've so significantly conveyed the vulnerabilities that this year brought for one's soul.. In the form of tragic incidences, poignancy and many unpredictable instances. But I do hope that this new year 2024 is truly beautiful for you and brings that healing which the last line of this sijo conveys.. A brilliant write.. Loved reading this.. ~my best wishes

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/3/2024 8:44:00 PM

I wrote a piece called SWOOSH where the shape of our bay, is prone to tsunamis as more than 200 townsfolk were swept out to sea including an elementary bayside school of 25. That school since, sits on the cliffside overlooking the bay. Total tsunamis are unknown but three have been known to be deadly. Near year's recoup voila 2024, Hiya, TLC. Aloha, William

Bill Baker

Date: 1/2/2024 10:14:00 PM

Well written to form, William. A tragic tale of life, injury and sickness and time to heal. Thanks for sharing, my friend. Happy New Year! Have a great 2024! Bill

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/2/2024 10:31:00 PM

Yes, indeed, a welcoming newness of 2024, Bill. It's glorious to return home, hoping the offshore buoys constant their recordings for a town hit too many times by tsunamis and more than 200 lives lost. Aloha, William

Silent One

Date: 1/2/2024 11:20:00 AM

Now that is a deep one.. I hope 2024 is much better for you my friend..

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/2/2024 11:37:00 AM

Agreed, 'tis I, happy to be in motion and not the house, that is--knock on wood, my friend. Aloha, William

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 1/1/2024 3:43:00 PM

I'm not familiar with this poetic form, but I do like the individual lines. I was engaged with your initial words..a house in motion near an ocean conjured up quite an image. Have a wonderful week, Sara

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/1/2024 6:02:00 PM

A quake/+, civil defense waits for buoys offshore, tsunami (?), left for family upland house 10k ft level, Mt. is abt 14k, a cousin found me unconscious/months recuperation--altitude sickness affects body function, closed the house, and now back home. Last time there I was only 6 yrs old.

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/1/2024 5:43:00 PM

Hi Sara, PS definition of Sijo attends to the stanzas' lines effectiveness as a whole, yet some years ago, possibly 'Poetry Foundation', there's furtherance within the lines where the 1st is purposed, and rewarded with the 2nd being its resolve and understanding, hence my use of the ellipsis, omits the Hangman's noose. It's an individual choice, and nothing more, my friend. Aloha, William

Tom Woody

Date: 1/1/2024 3:42:00 PM

Well Bill here's hoping 2024 is not so icky

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/1/2024 5:47:00 PM

Tom, good buddy, ditto in part, i.e., 2024. Aloha, William