My 2023: Ugh

A house in motion near an ocean ... cautious one to leave.
A highland house owned by time affects one ... wakes to a place in whites.
A house boarded by healed one ... one's beach house welcomes New Year.

analogyappreciationconfidenceencouraginghealthsijo

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Paula Goldsmith

January 9, 2024 at 9:22 AM

Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful write. Have a blessed day writing away................

William Kelii Kekaula

January 9, 2024 at 10:43 AM

Thank you so much, Paula, and enjoy, Aloha, William

Andrea Dietrich

January 8, 2024 at 11:29 AM

ahhh, so this must have been in Hawaii. thanks for entering my contest, Hilo. Let's hope for a better year in 2024. (Which house was yours in the poem?)

William Kelii Kekaula

January 8, 2024 at 12:00 PM

Both, the townhouse/beach house is my bayfront home (read my poem 'SWOOSH', to get my meaning), and the mountain house/family get-a-way, I inherited wholly after my sister passed (the last of my family). It sits mid-isle where realtor dad met the client's (60% interest) being in Kona (opposite Hilo) side of the isle. THANKS, Andrea. Aloha, William

Hiya Sharma

January 3, 2024 at 8:05 PM

This is a very deep sijo, dear William. 2023 wasn't quite a fair year for me, or so to say, it was one of the most chaotic and gloomy ones.. You've so significantly conveyed the vulnerabilities that this year brought for one's soul.. In the form of tragic incidences, poignancy and many unpredictable instances. But I do hope that this new year 2024 is truly beautiful for you and brings that healing which the last line of this sijo conveys.. A brilliant write.. Loved reading this.. ~my best wishes

William Kelii Kekaula

January 3, 2024 at 8:44 PM

I wrote a piece called SWOOSH where the shape of our bay, is prone to tsunamis as more than 200 townsfolk were swept out to sea including an elementary bayside school of 25. That school since, sits on the cliffside overlooking the bay. Total tsunamis are unknown but three have been known to be deadly. Near year's recoup voila 2024, Hiya, TLC. Aloha, William

Bill Baker

January 2, 2024 at 10:14 PM

Well written to form, William. A tragic tale of life, injury and sickness and time to heal. Thanks for sharing, my friend. Happy New Year! Have a great 2024! Bill

William Kelii Kekaula

January 2, 2024 at 10:31 PM

Yes, indeed, a welcoming newness of 2024, Bill. It's glorious to return home, hoping the offshore buoys constant their recordings for a town hit too many times by tsunamis and more than 200 lives lost. Aloha, William