Muted Blue

I'll hold this place for her loving faintly-
fragile, and tepid outer layer veils so thinly
a gorgeous core shining bright and quietly
  Her eyes say more
    than lips betraying her thoughts
 as they swirl to intriguing depth.
 I dive, plunge deeply-secretly
   wading in thought's waters
     loving the expanded borders
        hidden beyond your rippled surface.
As birds singing, primp their rehearsed tune,
your diamond shines reluctant
from realities igneous tomb

I wan't to know the words she's trapped in blue
fluttering chests locked tightly when nervous
posture tells of something more.
Hushed often before, and muted now conditioned
to repress your heart...it's hard to breathe
as you selfconsciously hold your breath

Move those lips to mine
  and whisper each trapped caption
    your mind froze but never lost,
open the soul to feeling once more
like blood reddening air exposure
freeing the absence of feeling
...replaced with this tuned in euphoria
     blaring melodies warm and familiar to our ears



 
  *Inspired by Nathan's "Diamond in the Rough" contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 11/25/2009 12:03:00 PM
I'm very, very fond of this poem.i believe i will favorite it.i love this poem.magnificent writing.I can feel your poem in such a spiritual way.oh and thanks for the comment Steve, im looking forward to more of your writing.mine can relate to yours! -Lynette
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Date: 9/4/2009 4:44:00 PM
Most excellent!!! Ripe with meaning! Light & Love
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Date: 8/3/2009 5:59:00 PM
How time slips away from us and prevents us from enjoying beautiful talents such as yours! You have a gift that I look forward to exploring in depth! Wonderful piece! Deb
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Date: 8/2/2009 1:22:00 PM
You have a great talent for imagery. "she's trapped in blue..." great line and a fresh image. Always a pleasure reading your work. -Jason
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Date: 6/29/2009 4:01:00 PM
the use of words and images. you still got it. John H Loving III
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Date: 6/3/2009 8:59:00 PM
A powerful outpouring here Steve, excellent writing as always.
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Date: 6/3/2009 9:28:00 AM
Well written, strong and very to the point in such a poetic style. Enjoyed and have a great day.
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Date: 6/2/2009 7:33:00 PM
Your diction is impeccable... the overall effect of this poem (and it IS SO beautiful) is completely embodied in the title. This poem is going in my official list of all time favorites... I love this "open the soul to feeling once more like blood reddening air exposure freeing the absence of feeling."
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Date: 6/2/2009 3:25:00 PM
Winner, Winner!..wonderful..I have tachycardia.BG
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Date: 6/2/2009 12:45:00 PM
Amazing and outstanding twist on Nathan's Diamond in the Rough contest!! Well done,...and good luck !!
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Date: 6/2/2009 9:38:00 AM
This is a very strong piece Steve...you have incorporate the theme very well in your poem..best wishes my friend.
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