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Written in 2017, I recalled my childhood group of friends and I giving a dead field mouse a viking funeral in a nearby stream for being so brave trying to navigate through a unfilled in ground pool. It was both very sweet but it awakened a sense of fear of my own mortality, and reawakened some trauma I had of seeing my passed away brother.

Amidst summer’s day
Post middle school finale
In the concrete valley
A vanguard viking lay

We gathered as a ragtag crew
Peeled his corpse off the floor
Carrying him, despite the gore.
To the stream, as we knew what to do

Fashioning a mausoleum of straw
Hoping he felt no disdain,
His grave enveloped in flame
And gently floated away.

It was there I thought to myself,
“What is the meaning of it all?”

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024



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Date: 4/22/2024 6:11:00 PM
Engaging and interesting. So sorry about your brother.
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B. Andrew Kelly
Date: 4/24/2024 3:23:00 PM
thank you for the kind words and for taking the time to read my work. i hope you have a great day
Date: 4/14/2024 9:22:00 PM
A fave right away…poignancy and introspection. It felt like a scene from a movie. Well done…so sorry for your loss. Today, well really yesterday as it is after midnight, my mom has been gone 3 years.
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Date: 4/15/2024 10:13:00 AM
firstly i am sorry for the loss of your mother, i wish you solace as you continue to move forward in your grief. the goal of this when i wrote it was to evoke a feeling of Stand By Me, so I am glad it seemed to shine through. I appreciate you taking the time to read these words
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