Notes About The Poem

Murky Thick Haze

bluesy blurbs 
    of
brumal 
    blackness
      its 
  crawling 
clasps
   of 
silvery 
  gnawing
    below 
      shriveled 
            shades
       of 
       oxidized
    & 
      deep 
         haze
 immure
&
  wait

   awakening
     cold winter
         warm soul
&
         henceforth
     will hear
   pearly 
chants
    from  
      Birdie
        Green

with neon 
  embers 
     swirling
        fractals 
of
  gemmed 
      hues
 in 
 spirit
   for 
     soft 
        knock 
of 
   spring
           on 
    frozen 
shell
of 
withered 
     dreams

Written: January 15, 2023

3rd place contest winner

NOTE:THIS IS AN OPEN(organic) FORM VERSE   using spaces&breaks without grammatical symbols ,the ' open' relies upon 'the one breath limitation' & so inherently requires the 'reader' (reciter) to input and responds thus making this enigmatic form a two way interplay & interpretatIon unique to the moment& changing according to mood is inherently variable.

Brian Strand Contest No 1170 Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Brian Strand
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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George Avatar
January 17, 2023 at 6:11 AM
Wow, you have become an unchallenged master of this poetic form. Congratulations on your great win in Brian's contest !
Rodrigues Avatar
January 17, 2023 at 5:34 AM
Nicely done, Lasaad! Lots of great images beginning with the first 4 lines!
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
January 16, 2023 at 10:52 PM
Nicely outlined and delicate traces of refined artistry, Lasaad, with my compliments, cheers indeed my friend, Aloha William
Buehler Avatar
January 16, 2023 at 9:20 PM
A wonderfully well crafted poem, Lasaad! Love the beautiful picture, too. This is a fave. Congratulations on your win.
Dietrich Avatar
January 16, 2023 at 11:13 AM
Way to go in the contest with this gem!! Hey, I was trying to see the video you put a link to, and it went to an LDS orchestra music (the religion I was brought up in) and then I typed in Zach's video and saw that one. Cool video!
Kendrick Avatar
January 16, 2023 at 10:55 AM
Congratulations on this great winner. Way to go. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my page with congratulations. Sara
Fowler Avatar
January 16, 2023 at 10:37 AM
Wonderful Lasaad. Nice alliteration and form. Congratulations! :)
Ashley Avatar
January 16, 2023 at 10:30 AM
Dear Lasaad, the beauty of your alliteration, assonance and imagery is enchanting. How beautifully the images cascade down through you poem. “frozen shell of withered dreams” - wow! Such a superb piece! Congratulations for your excellent placement in Brian’s contest. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan
Pandit Avatar
January 16, 2023 at 6:12 AM
Your creative spirits shine in this space my friend. Wonderful images throughout. Best to you.
Tor Avatar
January 15, 2023 at 3:32 PM
Lovely message in this difficult form Lasaad. Wonderfully penned by you. Brian Strand would be proud of you if he saw this one...
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