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bluesy blurbs of brumal blackness its crawling clasps of silvery gnawing below shriveled shades of oxidized & deep haze immure & wait awakening cold winter warm soul & henceforth will hear pearly chants from Birdie Green with neon embers swirling fractals of gemmed hues in spirit for soft knock of spring on frozen shell of withered dreams Written: January 15, 2023 3rd place contest winner NOTE:THIS IS AN OPEN(organic) FORM VERSE using spaces&breaks without grammatical symbols ,the ' open' relies upon 'the one breath limitation' & so inherently requires the 'reader' (reciter) to input and responds thus making this enigmatic form a two way interplay & interpretatIon unique to the moment& changing according to mood is inherently variable. Brian Strand Contest No 1170 Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Brian Strand

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Date: 1/17/2023 6:11:00 AM
Wow, you have become an unchallenged master of this poetic form. Congratulations on your great win in Brian's contest !
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Date: 1/17/2023 5:34:00 AM
Nicely done, Lasaad! Lots of great images beginning with the first 4 lines!
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Date: 1/16/2023 10:52:00 PM
Nicely outlined and delicate traces of refined artistry, Lasaad, with my compliments, cheers indeed my friend, Aloha William
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Date: 1/16/2023 9:20:00 PM
A wonderfully well crafted poem, Lasaad! Love the beautiful picture, too. This is a fave. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 1/16/2023 11:13:00 AM
Way to go in the contest with this gem!! Hey, I was trying to see the video you put a link to, and it went to an LDS orchestra music (the religion I was brought up in) and then I typed in Zach's video and saw that one. Cool video!
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Date: 1/16/2023 10:55:00 AM
Congratulations on this great winner. Way to go. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my page with congratulations. Sara
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Date: 1/16/2023 10:37:00 AM
Wonderful Lasaad. Nice alliteration and form. Congratulations! :)
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Date: 1/16/2023 10:30:00 AM
Dear Lasaad, the beauty of your alliteration, assonance and imagery is enchanting. How beautifully the images cascade down through you poem. “frozen shell of withered dreams” - wow! Such a superb piece! Congratulations for your excellent placement in Brian’s contest. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 1/16/2023 6:12:00 AM
Your creative spirits shine in this space my friend. Wonderful images throughout. Best to you.
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Date: 1/15/2023 3:32:00 PM
Lovely message in this difficult form Lasaad. Wonderfully penned by you. Brian Strand would be proud of you if he saw this one...
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