Murder In the Tunnel

Moon concealed by shadow of Grim Reaper
Under guise of the gloomy clouds of storm –
Reason enough to stay at home and not
Dread the deadly, wary walk at midnight.
Eerie noises from the rumbling thunder, 
Rats scuttling and skittering to find shelter.

Intense and impassioned fear crept in as she
Neared the steps leading to the tunnel.

The tunnel! She disregarded, or had forgotten, 
How dark and dangerous to walk alone, 
Envisaging the glint of that murderous knife.

The tunnel! She knew she shouldn’t go
Until daylight and remembered her final trip.
Nearer and nearer she silently crept
Not heeding her internal warnings to flee.
Evermore replaying, she will wander at midnight
Leaving ruby blood tears among crystal raindrops.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2021



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Date: 3/6/2021 7:37:00 AM
Very powerfully penned. Congratulations. Well done. Brian
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 3/6/2021 8:39:00 AM
Thanks for the visit and congrats Brian. :) Linda
Date: 2/13/2021 8:51:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Linda.
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 2/14/2021 6:15:00 AM
Hi Eve. Many thanks for the congrats! Linda
Date: 2/12/2021 10:21:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning placement, I especially love your last line. :-)
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 2/12/2021 11:01:00 AM
Hi Joanna. Thanks for visiting and leaving such a nice comment! :) Linda
Date: 2/12/2021 9:53:00 AM
Your very last line so stark and so good. I love it, congrats on your winning poet.
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 2/12/2021 9:55:00 AM
Oh so many thanks for your visit and nice comments. :) Linda
Date: 2/12/2021 7:32:00 AM
- She should never have gone - Congratulations so much on your win, Linda :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 2/12/2021 9:55:00 AM
Thanks Anne-Lise. A fun contest to be sure! hugs {} Linda
Date: 2/12/2021 6:04:00 AM
We should not go and if we do ruby blood tears among crystal raindrops is what we get. Sees write. Congratulations on your premier contest win. Take care Rama
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 2/12/2021 7:16:00 AM
Many thanks Rama. I always appreciate your kind words. :) Linda
Date: 2/12/2021 3:42:00 AM
Congratulations and kind wishes, Kai
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 2/12/2021 7:15:00 AM
Thank you for the placement Kai. A wonderful contest and a lot of fun. Thanks for sponsoring.:) Linda
Date: 1/30/2021 3:56:00 PM
Yes are characters like to go where they shouldn’t!
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 1/30/2021 5:19:00 PM
Thanks Kim. I always appreciate your comments and visits. :) Linda
Date: 1/30/2021 11:29:00 AM
Excellent how you built and sustained suspense. Repetition of "the Tunnel!" is inspired, as is "ruby blood tears." Poe would be proud, even without "evermore." Should be top winner.
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 1/30/2021 12:36:00 PM
You are too kind Eric. :) My thanks for your visit and encouraging words! Linda
Date: 1/30/2021 9:52:00 AM
Opening suspense lines grab and hold attention. A haunting murder story, Linda. All the best.
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 1/30/2021 11:37:00 AM
Hi Vijay. I am always happy for you to visit and comment. Many thanks for the review and feedback. :) Linda
Date: 1/29/2021 11:15:00 PM
Quite scary write. The ending is a surprise up to a point. Perfect murder. ~~
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 1/30/2021 7:10:00 AM
Hello Victor. :) How are you today my friend? Many thanks for the visit and comments. Linda
Date: 1/29/2021 10:19:00 PM
Wow! Superb write! Best of luck for the contest!
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 1/30/2021 7:08:00 AM
Many thanks for the visit and kind comments. And thanks for the best wishes :) Linda
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