Notes About The Poem

Placed 3rd in Joseph May's Eight Words 2 contest, August 2024

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Motivation



“When lilacs last in the dooryard bloomed, . . . ”
the weary high-school student read with a sigh.
The sun had long since set and darkness loomed.
Each night, homework and slumber for Todd’s time vie.
His interests do not in somber poetry lie.

With misty eyes, his teacher, so deeply affected
while reading Whitman’s lines aloud, hoped to stimulate
an appreciation for their timeless themes. Often, she corrected
the class for childish, insensitive actions that tend to deflate
a teacher’s hopes—passing notes, napping, etc.-- Do better times await?

No efforts to cajole them into class participation
with rewards—extra points, field trips, etc.—have gone far;
but their interests in other areas rise to elation:
etching on metal, acting, sports, and playing the guitar.
Perhaps their view of poetry will someday be up to par.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Kendrick Avatar
September 2, 2024 at 3:35 AM
Congratulations on your winning work in Joseph's contest. Way to go. Thanks for sharing your creative talent with us. Sara K
mysore Avatar
August 28, 2024 at 5:03 AM
congratulations dear poet. cheers.
Canerdy Avatar
August 30, 2024 at 8:55 PM
Thanks so much, Thriveni. Janice
May Avatar
August 27, 2024 at 8:08 AM
Very nicely penned Janice, Congrats on your win
Canerdy Avatar
August 27, 2024 at 9:19 AM
THANK YOU, Joseph, and thanks for sponsoring. Janice
Gasun Avatar
August 17, 2024 at 9:56 PM
This is brilliant my dear poet friend Janice! You're so creative to weave a story using the given words in the prompt. I loved it and enjoyed it immensely. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs
Canerdy Avatar
August 18, 2024 at 8:18 PM
Len, thanks a million for these kind words! Janice
Kauffman Avatar
August 16, 2024 at 11:36 AM
Really nice use of the required words, Janice, to create this story - this experience that teachers so often experience. There is much going on in this poem You have blended all of your elements with a precise flair. You made a difficult task look easy. Best wishes for the contest. Blessings to you!
Canerdy Avatar
August 18, 2024 at 8:19 PM
Sam, I REALLY appreciate your great response to my poem. I worked hard on this one!! Janice
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