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Motionless

Motionless

It looked such a sorry sight
Standing in the shed
Covered in rust and dust
With just a trace of red

A vibrant red with a flash of black
Across the outside door
No sign of this embellishment
As the car sinks into the floor of the shed

A car that has lost its glory
Stands motionless and dead
This old car was my pride and joy
Many moons ago

It's going to be a wrench
To see this vehicle go
Even though the seats are worn
As are the tyres, gears and brakes

When the engine is turned on
A dreadful noise it makes
Smoke billows everywhere
The muffler has snuffed it

Mice have made their home in there
Which they must soon all exit
Broken windscreen, windows scratched
Doors all buckled and dented

Tattered stickers on the car
Air freshener that once was scented
I suppose it's true or so it's said
Everything has its day

This was my thinking
As the car was towed away
To the wreckers. a graveyard for most
One wonders if those worn-out cars
Become angels or ghosts

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019




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Date: 12/3/2021 6:23:00 AM
A fun first poem! I remember my red Datsun. It would make a cute music jingle when you opened the door but it wore out and I was ready to drop kick it off a cliff at the end. You love them…those first “velveteen rabbit” cars.
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Date: 7/28/2021 10:53:00 PM
What a great first poem. I’m glad I stopped by.
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Shirley Hawkins
Date: 7/29/2021 8:03:00 PM
Thank you, Richard
Date: 2/8/2021 3:58:00 PM
A pleasure to find your lovely poem published in the 2020 PS Anthology, Shirley ~
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Date: 11/16/2019 6:03:00 AM
Thought i would check out your first post, you are a great poet and im glad you are part of this site..
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Shirley Hawkins
Date: 11/16/2019 4:49:00 PM
Thank you very much for your kind encouraging comments, I feel privileged to be accepted so warmly ...
Date: 10/31/2019 6:39:00 AM
"everything has its day" - this car poem makes me sad like when I pass a junkyard full of cars that have been smashed, crushed and otherwise obliterated. I love my cars; they become friends.
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Shirley Hawkins
Date: 11/8/2019 3:38:00 PM
Thank you for your kind reply. Everything has a use-by date, doesn't it
Date: 10/31/2019 12:10:00 AM
##This old car was my pride and joy Many moons ago##Wow.. This is a nice poem..
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Shirley Hawkins
Date: 11/8/2019 3:54:00 PM
Thank you for your encouraging remarks.

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