Valsa George Poet Haiku

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August- 8- 2025

1402 Poetry Contest

Sponsor- Brian Strand

~~Placed Tenth~

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moth

                                                             \ /
                                                              U
                                    OoOoOoOoO    II   OoOoOoOoO  
                                           i’m a           II     goofy moth
                                        % %%%%      II     %%%%%
                                foolishly drawn      II     to your flame
                                oO-   to be burnt   II     in fire   -Oo 
                                              OooO       II     OooO  
                                        OoOoOoO     II    OoOoOo
                                                              U                                                  



I’m a goofy moth
foolishly drawn to your flame~
to be burnt in fire

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John Fleming August 13, 2025 at 8:44 AM A grizzly end for the moth...but, unfortunately...all rather frequent. :) john

Andrea Dietrich August 10, 2025 at 9:45 PM Awww sweet goofy moth. I enjoyed this one

Speaks Volumes August 9, 2025 at 6:58 AM Awww imagine burning such an adorable moth ! :( You created him so wonderfully. Well done my friend.

Joseph P. DiMino August 9, 2025 at 6:19 AM I think, sometimes we are all goofy moths:) Love it! Well done.

Rowena Velasco August 8, 2025 at 11:53 PM Nice! Short and sharp—like a little flash of playful danger. The moth-and-flame metaphor is classic but always effective, especially with that touch of self-aware goofiness. Want to build it into a slightly longer piece or keep it as a punchy one-liner?

sara Etgen-Baker August 8, 2025 at 4:46 PM well done, Valsa! best wishes with the contest, hugs, Sara

Zyrool Gifford August 8, 2025 at 9:02 AM Hello Valsa, a beautiful Haiku, loved your artwork. Good luck with the contest, my friend.

Sotto Poet August 8, 2025 at 3:57 AM Wonderful shape that looks like a real moth. Your haiku portrays perfectly how the moth is drawn to the flame. Good luck with the contest.