moth

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                                       OoOoOoOoO      II   OoOoOoOoO  
                                           i’m a             II     goofy moth
                                        % %%%%      II     %%%%%
                                    foolishly drawn     II     to your flame
                                 oO-   to be burnt     II     in fire   -Oo 
                                              OooO        II     OooO  
                                          OoOoOoO      II    OoOoOo
                                                              U                                                  



I’m a goofy moth
foolishly drawn to your flame~
to be burnt in fire

4th gradeanalogydeathhaiku

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John Fleming

Date: 8/13/2025 8:44:00 AM

A grizzly end for the moth...but, unfortunately...all rather frequent. :) john

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/10/2025 9:45:00 PM

Awww sweet goofy moth. I enjoyed this one

Speaks Volumes

Date: 8/9/2025 6:58:00 AM

Awww imagine burning such an adorable moth ! :( You created him so wonderfully. Well done my friend.

Joe Dimino

Date: 8/9/2025 6:19:00 AM

I think, sometimes we are all goofy moths:) Love it! Well done.

Rowena Velasco

Date: 8/8/2025 11:53:00 PM

Nice! Short and sharp—like a little flash of playful danger. The moth-and-flame metaphor is classic but always effective, especially with that touch of self-aware goofiness. Want to build it into a slightly longer piece or keep it as a punchy one-liner?