Morning Star

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Wink at me,
shimmered vixen ...
dawn waits
to warm your feet,
and tickle your toes!
Tell me, true,
your tale ...
an age spent
twinkling -
daubing night
with your kiss ...
twilight's paramour,
teasing the sun to rise,
I ...
but your earthly fool.






Written and submitted on June 5, 2020
For the "Pick-A-Title, Volume 18 - Yalto 2" Poetry Contest
Edward Ibeh, Sponsor.

( This form is called 'Yalto', created by Edward Ibeh. Syllables = 3, 4, 2, 4, 5, 3, 2, 3, 2, 3, 3, 5, 6, 1, 5, counted at HowManySyllables.com )

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/8/2020 6:06:00 PM

I love your entry Greg! Congratulations on your second placement! xxoo

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/12/2020 12:37:00 AM

Many kind thank you's, Connie, I so appreciate it, Dear Poet! :o) <3

Sam Kauffman

Date: 6/8/2020 2:03:00 PM

I was captured at "Wink at me," Gregory. Your Yalto overflows with playful images and is so whimsical in tone. Your relationship with the morning star is like two BFF's - delightful. A fav for me. Congratulations!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/12/2020 12:37:00 AM

What a wonderful comment, my friend, you truly honor me with the time and thought you put into your comments, and it is always so appreciated! Blessings, Brother! :o)

Aditi Mishra

Date: 6/8/2020 7:27:00 AM

This is so gorgeous Greg! It paints a soothing picture of an innocent lover waiting to be drenched in love. Congratulations on your win :)

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/12/2020 12:35:00 AM

Many kind thanks for your wonderful comments, Aditi - blessings! :o) <3

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 6/7/2020 7:34:00 PM

shimmered vixen, unique description of the morning star...Well-done, Gregory, a fine yalto; congrats on your placement

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/12/2020 12:34:00 AM

Many kind thanks to you, Reason - I'm so pleased you liked my poem ... this one is special to me, and I appreciate the wonderful comments, and your taking the time. Blessings to you, My Friend! :o)