Moonstruck Mystere

Battling the waves of an ocean that sways to and fro in ever search of a place of mirth. And those who dare face her moonstruck mystere Will know the price it takes to reach paradise. Their spirit will be aglow By the life they've come to know They no longer fear death for they breathe the heavens' breath. Life is like an ocean in constant motion As we brave her character We will inherit the earth. By CarolineCécile Copyright © 06.24.11

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Wilma Neels

Date: 6/27/2011 10:16:00 AM

Caroline, really love your analogy and your end it with so much wisdom as well.. I quite enjoyed this write of yours tonight.. Love Wilma

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 6/26/2011 12:36:00 PM

Really like the analogy between life and the motion of the sea, Caroline. Love the way you convey emotions so creatively and this poem is breathtaking in its wisdom. My time here is limited by my physical therapist's order, but I just had to check in on my favorite writers for a few minutes. Much love, Carolyn

James Foulk

Date: 6/26/2011 8:39:00 AM

a great write, well written. thank you for your advice but that is the way i wrote it, if i want to it to rhyme i would have written it that way. i Don't go by forms, that takes away my creations, if it comes out that way then find. I know you are only trying to help.

Gert W. Knop

Date: 6/25/2011 11:03:00 AM

So true: Life is like an ocean in constant motion! But sometimes it could also be a desert, vast and empty. But I prefer the ocean picture of life. Nicely penned! À bientôt...und alles Gute!....Gert:)

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/25/2011 6:33:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your wonderful poetry today Caroline. Thank you for sharing and I hope you have a wonderful weekend. Love, Carol

Don Johnson

Date: 6/25/2011 1:38:00 AM

Pretty neat babe, Inherit the earth with a touch of mirth , yes we must be brave. I spose we write about what we see, and words rattle eternaly xo, Don

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 6/24/2011 9:01:00 PM

Hi Caroline cool Quatrain..I see you used all one rhyme scheme. As you mentioned in my quatrain I used a couple. I actually thought one could do that with this form. But come to think of it I believe that was the sonnet. Oh well will know better next time. Thanks. Also the brake in "braking muse report" is supposed to be that way as in stopping -- driving through the scenery .. braking as applying the brakes. Pun intended as is Muse for news. Thanks again

Caroline Cécile Delacroix
Date: 6/24/2011 9:37:00 PM

Thank you for your comment, Robert! Yeah, I did use one rhyme scheme, as that is what I believe a quatrain should be like. I guess that is the technique part, I think the art part is more important anyway, and yours did evoke quite well what you wanted to convey. Hope you don't mind my honest reviews. I wish more people would do that on my poetry, because it would improve in this art of writing better. Caroline.