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Written for Anoucheka Gangabissoon poetry contest:

In the middle of the night when the butterflies dance to the moon's song.

“We are all like the bright moon, we still have our darker side.”
Khalil Gibran

A tepid breeze delicately descends, embedding a sphere of embers engulfed in saffron flames, but intrinsic illuminations cannot soothe somber sorrows. Splashes of persimmon and periwinkle horizons, turn indigo, before twilight disappears into ebony hues. Nocturnal pondering drifts to magical memories. In the middle of the night, when butterflies dance to the moon's song. A plethora of elegance surrounds, as a million fireflies prepare a path of crystal fragility. Fate has little sympathy for forgotten symphonies. In the mysterious music of tonight, pearl in the sky reflects in scarlet shades, moonlight shimmers like blood on distant tides. Strings of sorrow serenade in stentorious stings. melancholic mind moves like a funeral march, yearning for veiled daylight behind mute mists. There is an ache in absence, a despair in distance - reflected through lamenting eyes. If only we could smash this cocoon, that prevents us from floating free - but majestic chic wings remain in chains. My lips are like velvet petals, forming the grandest golden sunflower, confined behind onyx structures of frailty, vulnerably yearning to be healed, by tender rosewater kisses. Painful palpitations from a pomegranate heart, bleed in bitter shades of black. A hollowness only separated souls silently sense. Hope can be hidden behind a canopy of Cimmerian clouds. To create a rainbow, love requires sun rays and rain drops. To weave an eternal pattern, where beloveds ascend in peace and harmony - forever.

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Date: 12/21/2023 6:48:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! Your "Moon's Song" is an amazing write. Love your lines, Painful palpitations from a pomegranate heart, bleed in bitter shades of black. & Hope can be hidden behind a canopy of Cimmerian clouds. So True...  Merry Christmas..........
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Date: 12/1/2023 7:13:00 AM
Wahh.. this is truly amazing.. so beautiful and such emotion.. this is a very beautiful poem, silent one, amazing..
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Date: 11/28/2023 7:02:00 PM
Moments can be mysterious, and while music mesmerizes, the melody can cause thoughts to twist and turn. This is beautiful, tender and filled with so many emotions. My best to you, Silent One. Hugs, Brandy
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Date: 11/28/2023 4:46:00 PM
It is so easy to get caught up in your words and whisked away into another world ... Wonderful work, as always, Silent One :)
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Date: 11/27/2023 6:13:00 PM
Silent One, your vivid figures of speech and effective sound devices paint a movingly meditative setting. Janice
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Date: 11/27/2023 12:51:00 AM
delicious and beautiful music for the soul, each word from the moon, is priceless, thanks a lot poet
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Date: 11/26/2023 5:12:00 PM
Very beautiful, with haunting images....
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Date: 11/26/2023 3:19:00 PM
There is a rainbow after the rain to give hope, Very nicely penned Silent
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Date: 11/26/2023 2:23:00 PM
Gorgeous and so colorful!
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Date: 11/26/2023 1:16:00 PM
Yes, sometimes hope is hidden but God can definitely send a rainbow/a rainbow of love. I enjoyed reading this one. Your visit to my page was encouraging. Sara K
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Date: 11/25/2023 4:34:00 PM
I thoroughly enjoyed this exquisitely beautiful, melancholic presentation, Silent One. It's a FAVE for me! :)
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Date: 11/25/2023 4:23:00 PM
Very beautiful read!
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Date: 11/25/2023 4:02:00 PM
an almost magical creation, Silent One, with a host of emotions conveyed. So many powerful and poignant lines. I liked:There is an ache in absence, a despair in distance -. These lines struck a chord with me for they described my mood today so perfectly: melancholic mind moves like a funeral march, yearning for veiled daylight behind mute mists." What can I say? Just one of those days, but your poem touched me...thank you for your words & have a splendid weekend, Sara
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Date: 11/25/2023 1:34:00 PM
Very intriguing, very well written Silent One.
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Date: 11/25/2023 10:38:00 AM
Rather beautiful SO! Debx
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Date: 11/25/2023 10:36:00 AM
rich and filled with intrigue - 'There is an ache in absence, a despair in distance -' - a gem of a thought
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Date: 11/25/2023 10:27:00 AM
A tepid breeze delicately descends, embedding a sphere of embers engulfed in saffron flames--a beautiful opening to this awesome moon song, SO. Music of the night shimmers in moonlight in poetic revelry!
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Date: 11/25/2023 6:30:00 AM
Silent One your fascinating linguistic play, clever use of alliteration, and lively imagery flawlessly generate an idyllic atmosphere, packed with longing and a plethora of poignant and painful thoughts that are capable of plucking at any person's emotions. Beyond all, the ending has captured my fascination. Best of wishes for the contest
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Date: 11/25/2023 6:16:00 AM
This is where you and Inky become twins in poetry. I can see why you two collab so well. Many beautiful images here, but my fave stanza is the first one
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Date: 11/25/2023 5:32:00 AM
This is so beautiful, i wrote for this prompt too and im suppsed to post my take but i must say i am in awe of this, the magical wordplay, alliterations and imagery truly sets a romantic scene with longing and so many profound and poignant emotions that can pull any heart string. I especially love the ending the most “ love requires sun rays and rain drops.weave an eternal pattern, where beloveds ascend in peace and harmony forever.” I agree and also the line about cocoon really hit strong too
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Date: 11/25/2023 5:33:00 AM
And that absence line hah i wrote something similar in my poem too :/ i guess happens sometimes. When we write on same prompts. Goodluck. Another fave for me this is.

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