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Moonlit Pond

sitting by the pond
the water glimmers, shimmers
like a silver light
love’s eyes shine, grazing in mine -
real, or a reflection too?


5/27/12
For Rick's "Let's Pass a Tanka Love Note" contest

Copyright © Black Eyed Susan | Year Posted 2012

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Joseph May Date: 9/26/2012 9:16:00 AM soup mail Login to Reply

Matthew Anish Date: 7/17/2012 4:39:00 PM Nice use ot that Asian form! Peace & Love Matthew Anish Login to Reply

Poet Destroyer A Date: 7/16/2012 4:42:00 AM Susan, stopping by to say good night...pd Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 6/28/2012 7:40:00 PM oh susan, on that one poem of mine about the tough girl. I would have fought her. I was super skinny in those days and not practiced in kick boxing but maybe I'd have kicked her butt off that hill with my strong lets. hahaha (one can only dream) Did you open "about this poem"? If you do that, you can copy and paste my links to the two early poems I wrote (narration) in which I tell the story of what finally happened between me and my rival Margo. Login to Reply

Cyndi Macmillan Date: 6/1/2012 10:57:00 PM Wonderful! Last line haunts. Best wishes in the contest, dear! Hugs, Cyndi Login to Reply

Harry Horsman Date: 6/1/2012 3:52:00 PM lovely Tanka, good luck in contest. Login to Reply

Jack Horne Date: 5/31/2012 1:24:00 PM lovely tanka, Susan - love the clever last line Login to Reply

Kathryn Collins Date: 5/30/2012 7:11:00 AM Susan - beautiful end. I hope you did mean 'grazing' It fits. love, Kathy Login to Reply

Nathan D. Date: 5/30/2012 5:42:00 AM stop wasting your time on these useless forms that have little to no relevence i have seen glimpses of your talent and have come to expect more from you then just short poems filled with fascinating imagery. longer !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 5/29/2012 5:04:00 PM Susan, on rereading this one: did you mean to say "grazing" I think you meant gazing. I came here to see if you had new poems. I guess not. If you see any of yours I never read,please let me know. Am betting Joe will be home any second and wondering what to make for dinner! thanks for all the cute comments today. Luv, Andrea Login to Reply

Joseph May Date: 5/29/2012 7:52:00 AM very nice Susan.. I love the last line..love's illusion glimmers..good luck in the contest..Love ..Joseph. Login to Reply

Lisa Cooper Date: 5/28/2012 9:30:00 PM great write! Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 5/27/2012 6:47:00 PM I love how you made this a "reflection" about love, Susan. Glad I saw it here today. Login to Reply

Joann Grisetti Date: 5/27/2012 11:32:00 AM Wlle done love poem. Login to Reply

Terry O'Leary Date: 5/27/2012 11:24:00 AM Very nice... Terry Login to Reply

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 5/27/2012 11:20:00 AM Is it romance in the air......?....Lovely done this Tanka poem B.E.Susan. - Wish you luck in contest. - oxox Anne-Lise Login to Reply

David Williams Date: 5/27/2012 11:01:00 AM Susan looks real to me,..David Login to Reply

Richard Palmer Date: 5/27/2012 10:39:00 AM nice Black Eye Login to Reply

Debra Squyres Date: 5/27/2012 10:38:00 AM Good tanka....ahh the question, is it or is it not real?? Enjoyed !! Login to Reply

Russell Sivey Date: 5/27/2012 9:55:00 AM Wow, this is a powerful symbolic write my friend! I really enjoyed this wonderful poem that you have written so flawlessly! I love how you implied the fact that there is a moon present, I really liked that! This is an amazing write Susan! Great Work!! Login to Reply

Poet Destroyer A Date: 5/27/2012 9:49:00 AM Good Morning Susan, from Maryland ;-) ooo WHo, are you passing this Tanka toooo... I like the fitful shimmering light, .. the silver imagery is very captivating. I wonder too about your ending romantic question... WHat ever it is! I like the feelings you compose with your Tanka,, good luck in Ricks, contest... PD Login to Reply