Moonbathing

¦¦¦ ¦¦¦¦¦¦¦ I believed ¦¦¦ moonlight
could change me if ¦¦¦ ¦¦¦¦¦¦
I moved my head
on the pillow, ¦¦¦¦ ¦¦¦¦¦ ¦¦¦ ¦¦¦
¦¦¦ ¦¦¦ ¦¦¦¦ ¦¦¦¦¦¦
¦¦¦¦¦¦¦ ¦¦¦ ¦¦¦¦ ¦¦¦¦¦¦¦¦

I wanted beauty, ¦¦¦ ¦¦¦¦¦¦¦¦¦
¦¦¦¦¦ ¦¦¦ ¦¦¦¦¦¦ my body thinner,
my ¦¦¦¦ face paler.
I moonbathed
¦¦¦¦¦¦¦¦¦¦¦ ¦¦¦ ¦¦¦¦¦¦ ¦¦¦¦¦¦¦¦¦
But the moon's unsmiling stare
kept me awake. Mornings,
I was flushed and cross.

¦¦¦ ¦¦¦ on dark nights of deep sleep
¦¦¦¦ I dreamed ¦¦¦ ¦¦¦¦¦ ¦¦¦¦ ¦¦¦ ¦¦¦ ¦¦¦¦¦
and woke rested, ¦¦¦ if not beautiful,
filled with some other power.


(Blackout of The Well by Denise Levertov)
Copyright © | Year Posted 2026

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Gibbons Avatar
August 4, 2026 at 8:16 PM
Wow wow wow you amaze me with your genius work at this blackout poetry. 👏✍️❤️‍🩹 I need to start trying games. I made another song at 3am yesterday when I was wide awake. I need to get it on my page. So happy ur ere posting I really do miss you when your not ere awww ✍️🌹hugzzzz friend
Lane Avatar
August 5, 2026 at 6:01 AM
You are too kind with your praise, Dotti. Merci! 💕
Kavanagh  Avatar
August 4, 2026 at 12:43 PM
This is definitely the best blackout poetry I’ve read so far Lin, putting together a poem this good and coherent from within another is no mean feat, this form reminds me of doing weird crosswords that had all the answers hidden between a multitude of letters, the idea was to blackout the unwanted letters and build a crossword from the inside out, but you’ve taken the concept one step further here using sheer creativity, excellent piece of work, cheers David
Lane Avatar
August 4, 2026 at 4:16 PM
Many thanks for liking this blackout compilation, David. I think I’m hooked on the process and honored by your comments.
Smith nee Howarth Avatar
August 4, 2026 at 6:54 AM
Now there are some words to live by.
Lane Avatar
August 4, 2026 at 7:14 AM
That's a definite 'yes.' Thanks, Alison. Looks like the fun and games have pulled me in... addictive.. another yes.
Pigeon Tart Avatar
August 4, 2026 at 6:51 AM
Woah! This is my first blackout poem experience. I love your poem, so affecting. xomo
Lane Avatar
August 4, 2026 at 7:13 AM
Thanks so very much for the accolades, Mo. Give them a try. SOooo nice to read you.
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