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Moon That Once Was

Rising with a sunny day she looks to blue sky Reminiscing about sweet memories gone by Knowing too well where the dark clouds hide Clouds that thunder to dissipate her sunshine Familiar deliberations partner on her walks Haunting her path with discarded thoughts Reigning without consent her desolate mind A mind that torments flashing dreary signs From a distance he views the way she lives As indifference within he harbors willfully For the pain she caused breaking his heart His heart that now detests the world at large Giving final try to move spirits deadlocked He meets her tacitly at the edge of impasse But the sun sets soon and the moon's no show The moon that once was emblem of romance October 10, 2018 Placed first in Late 2018 standard contest by Brian Strand

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Suzanne Delaney

Date: 1/28/2019 10:36:00 AM

Great metaphor. The words hold from beginning to end Hugs, SuZ

Brandy Nicole

Date: 12/27/2018 3:10:00 PM

Your words always move me. Congratulations Vijay, on this win. ~ Brandy

Heidi Sands

Date: 12/27/2018 6:23:00 AM

Congratulations for your win Vijay! :)

Pashang Salehi

Date: 12/2/2018 10:28:00 PM

Your words have so much power, like the moon on the tides.

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 11/7/2018 2:24:00 AM

Such a 'real life' story. I have been there and have found new love, greater than ever. Kind wishes, Kai

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/26/2018 1:14:00 PM

Love can bring such joy or equally such pain. We are the pawns often sacrificed. Beautifully composed Vijay! : )

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/29/2018 3:11:00 PM

Thank you Connie.

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 10/18/2018 6:14:00 PM

very beautifully painted deep excellent pen i dare say the moon still holds a smile from time to time

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/29/2018 3:10:00 PM

Thank you Liam.

Paul Callus

Date: 10/16/2018 3:11:00 PM

A powerful rendition of pain and lost love, even though efforts were made to break the deadlock. Regards // paul

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/17/2018 5:39:00 PM

Thank you Paul.

Chris Hagy

Date: 10/14/2018 9:06:00 PM

Beautifully written piece...so sad love changes from things that once were.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/17/2018 5:38:00 PM

Thank you Chris.

Silent One

Date: 10/14/2018 9:16:00 AM

This one is so deep... great title..

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/17/2018 5:38:00 PM

Thank you Silent One.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 10/13/2018 4:48:00 PM

So sad--well conveys the theme that they cannot retrieve what they once had. Janice

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/17/2018 5:38:00 PM

Thank you Janice.

M. L. Kiser

Date: 10/13/2018 11:02:00 AM

Sad but, well done. Very well done... rejection is often met with indifference; this was powerful.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/13/2018 3:47:00 PM

Thank you M.L.K.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/13/2018 9:50:00 AM

All I can say is WOW!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/13/2018 3:47:00 PM

Thank you Richard.

Becca Teagan

Date: 10/12/2018 2:22:00 PM

Vijay, this is painfully lovely, hauntingly beautiful poetry. I love the way you've described the effects and symbolism of the moon.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/13/2018 6:43:00 AM

Thank you Becca..delighted by your visit..appreciate your kind remarks.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 10/11/2018 9:42:00 AM

This is hauntingly sad, Vijay, the heartbreaking romance..

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/11/2018 5:16:00 PM

Thank Jo, for your visit and feedback..I appreciate, as always.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/11/2018 7:16:00 AM

sentimental musings light the page, vijay... what an incredible play of emotion... huggs

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/11/2018 5:15:00 PM

Thank you nette..appreciate the kind words.

M. L. Kiser

Date: 10/11/2018 6:39:00 AM

Sadly painful but beautifully penned; there's great imagery here; one can feel the heartbreak. Well done.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/11/2018 5:15:00 PM

Thank you M.L.K. I appreciate your visit and comments.

Susan Ashley

Date: 10/10/2018 8:52:00 PM

The melancholy tone of your alluring title drew me into your sadly beautiful poem of heartbreak. Your last two lines are especially amazing in lost love imagery. A deep, moving and superb write, Vijay. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/11/2018 5:14:00 PM

Thank you for your generous comments Susan..appreciate your support.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/10/2018 5:44:00 PM

I really enjoyed the way you related the moon and how it once was filled with romantic feelings that are no more, Vijay

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/10/2018 6:16:00 PM

Thank you Andrea for that observation. Many thanks for the visit..appreciate and value your opinion.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/10/2018 5:36:00 PM

Vijay, you express so brilliantly how an embittered heart is hard to heal! A masterful piece my friend! : )

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/10/2018 6:15:00 PM

Yes--the two hearts are hard to heal..thank you Connie for your visit and comments. Appreciate it as always.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 10/10/2018 5:32:00 PM

The gentle touch of love will stay- if it was meant to. If not, then it wasn't meant to be. When the sun sets, but there is no moon. It sounds like there isn't any hope to me. Very sad indeed. Your thoughts tug deeply at the heart. ~ Brandy

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/10/2018 6:14:00 PM

Your analysis is spot on Brandy..many thanks for the visit..always appreciate your comments.

Joseph May

Date: 10/10/2018 3:34:00 PM

A reconciliation that wasn't written in the stars..Very nicely penned Vijay

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/10/2018 6:13:00 PM

This reconciliation didn't pan out..thank you for the visit and comments, Joseph.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 10/10/2018 1:13:00 PM

Your romantic side is stoking the fire of it's beautiful emblems, both sun and moon do their part when it comes to love. another well written beauty, Vij, have a wonderful day.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/10/2018 6:12:00 PM

Thank you Pixie..always happy to read your comments.

Mike Gentile

Date: 10/10/2018 11:23:00 AM

It does seem that some thing are just not meant to be as you so romantically and poetically express in your well written piece !!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/10/2018 6:11:00 PM

Somethings are not meant to be..so true, Mike..appreciate the comments..many thanks.

Lawrence Sharp

Date: 10/10/2018 10:17:00 AM

Very moody and, as always, visual. Very well penned.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/10/2018 11:09:00 AM

Appreciate your comments Lawrence..many many thanks.