Vijay Pandit Poet Verse

Moon That Once Was

Rising with a sunny day she looks to blue sky
Reminiscing about sweet memories gone by
Knowing too well where the dark clouds hide
Clouds that thunder to dissipate her sunshine

Familiar deliberations partner on her walks
Haunting her path with discarded thoughts
Reigning without consent her desolate mind
A mind that torments flashing dreary signs

From a distance he views the way she lives
As indifference within he harbors willfully
For the pain she caused breaking his heart
His heart that now detests the world at large

Giving final try to move spirits deadlocked
He meets her tacitly at the edge of impasse
But the sun sets soon and the moon's no show
The moon that once was emblem of romance

October 10, 2018
Placed first in Late 2018 standard contest by Brian Strand

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Suzanne Delaney January 28, 2019 at 10:36 AM Great metaphor. The words hold from beginning to end Hugs, SuZ

Brandy Nicole December 27, 2018 at 3:10 PM Your words always move me. Congratulations Vijay, on this win. ~ Brandy

Heidi Sands December 27, 2018 at 6:23 AM Congratulations for your win Vijay! :)

Pashang Salehi December 2, 2018 at 10:28 PM Your words have so much power, like the moon on the tides.

Kai Michael Neumann November 7, 2018 at 2:24 AM Such a 'real life' story. I have been there and have found new love, greater than ever. Kind wishes, Kai

Connie Marcum Wong October 26, 2018 at 1:14 PM Love can bring such joy or equally such pain. We are the pawns often sacrificed. Beautifully composed Vijay! : ) Vijay Pandit October 29, 2018 at 3:11 PM Thank you Connie.

Liam Mcdaid October 18, 2018 at 6:14 PM very beautifully painted deep excellent pen i dare say the moon still holds a smile from time to time Vijay Pandit October 29, 2018 at 3:10 PM Thank you Liam.

Paul Callus October 16, 2018 at 3:11 PM A powerful rendition of pain and lost love, even though efforts were made to break the deadlock. Regards // paul Vijay Pandit October 17, 2018 at 5:39 PM Thank you Paul.

Chris Hagy October 14, 2018 at 9:06 PM Beautifully written piece...so sad love changes from things that once were. Vijay Pandit October 17, 2018 at 5:38 PM Thank you Chris.

Silent One October 14, 2018 at 9:16 AM This one is so deep... great title.. Vijay Pandit October 17, 2018 at 5:38 PM Thank you Silent One.

Janice Canerdy October 13, 2018 at 4:48 PM So sad--well conveys the theme that they cannot retrieve what they once had. Janice Vijay Pandit October 17, 2018 at 5:38 PM Thank you Janice.

M. L. Kiser October 13, 2018 at 11:02 AM Sad but, well done. Very well done... rejection is often met with indifference; this was powerful. Vijay Pandit October 13, 2018 at 3:47 PM Thank you M.L.K.

Richard Lamoureux October 13, 2018 at 9:50 AM All I can say is WOW! Vijay Pandit October 13, 2018 at 3:47 PM Thank you Richard.

Becca Teagan October 12, 2018 at 2:22 PM Vijay, this is painfully lovely, hauntingly beautiful poetry. I love the way you've described the effects and symbolism of the moon. Vijay Pandit October 13, 2018 at 6:43 AM Thank you Becca..delighted by your visit..appreciate your kind remarks.

Joanna Daniel October 11, 2018 at 9:42 AM This is hauntingly sad, Vijay, the heartbreaking romance.. Vijay Pandit October 11, 2018 at 5:16 PM Thank Jo, for your visit and feedback..I appreciate, as always.

Nette Onclaud October 11, 2018 at 7:16 AM sentimental musings light the page, vijay... what an incredible play of emotion... huggs Vijay Pandit October 11, 2018 at 5:15 PM Thank you nette..appreciate the kind words.

M. L. Kiser October 11, 2018 at 6:39 AM Sadly painful but beautifully penned; there's great imagery here; one can feel the heartbreak. Well done. Vijay Pandit October 11, 2018 at 5:15 PM Thank you M.L.K. I appreciate your visit and comments.

Susan Ashley October 10, 2018 at 8:52 PM The melancholy tone of your alluring title drew me into your sadly beautiful poem of heartbreak. Your last two lines are especially amazing in lost love imagery. A deep, moving and superb write, Vijay. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Vijay Pandit October 11, 2018 at 5:14 PM Thank you for your generous comments Susan..appreciate your support.

Andrea Dietrich October 10, 2018 at 5:44 PM I really enjoyed the way you related the moon and how it once was filled with romantic feelings that are no more, Vijay Vijay Pandit October 10, 2018 at 6:16 PM Thank you Andrea for that observation. Many thanks for the visit..appreciate and value your opinion.

Connie Marcum Wong October 10, 2018 at 5:36 PM Vijay, you express so brilliantly how an embittered heart is hard to heal! A masterful piece my friend! : ) Vijay Pandit October 10, 2018 at 6:15 PM Yes--the two hearts are hard to heal..thank you Connie for your visit and comments. Appreciate it as always.

Brandy Nicole October 10, 2018 at 5:32 PM The gentle touch of love will stay- if it was meant to. If not, then it wasn't meant to be. When the sun sets, but there is no moon. It sounds like there isn't any hope to me. Very sad indeed. Your thoughts tug deeply at the heart. ~ Brandy Vijay Pandit October 10, 2018 at 6:14 PM Your analysis is spot on Brandy..many thanks for the visit..always appreciate your comments.

Joseph May October 10, 2018 at 3:34 PM A reconciliation that wasn't written in the stars..Very nicely penned Vijay Vijay Pandit October 10, 2018 at 6:13 PM This reconciliation didn't pan out..thank you for the visit and comments, Joseph.

Mystic Rose Rose October 10, 2018 at 1:13 PM Your romantic side is stoking the fire of it's beautiful emblems, both sun and moon do their part when it comes to love. another well written beauty, Vij, have a wonderful day. Vijay Pandit October 10, 2018 at 6:12 PM Thank you Pixie..always happy to read your comments.

Mike Gentile October 10, 2018 at 11:23 AM It does seem that some thing are just not meant to be as you so romantically and poetically express in your well written piece !! Vijay Pandit October 10, 2018 at 6:11 PM Somethings are not meant to be..so true, Mike..appreciate the comments..many thanks.

Lawrence Sharp October 10, 2018 at 10:17 AM Very moody and, as always, visual. Very well penned. Vijay Pandit October 10, 2018 at 11:09 AM Appreciate your comments Lawrence..many many thanks.

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