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Moon That Once Was

Rising with a sunny day she looks to blue sky
Reminiscing about sweet memories gone by
Knowing too well where the dark clouds hide
Clouds that thunder to dissipate her sunshine

Familiar deliberations partner on her walks
Haunting her path with discarded thoughts
Reigning without consent her desolate mind
A mind that torments flashing dreary signs

From a distance he views the way she lives
As indifference within he harbors willfully
For the pain she caused breaking his heart
His heart that now detests the world at large

Giving final try to move spirits deadlocked
He meets her tacitly at the edge of impasse
But the sun sets soon and the moon's no show
The moon that once was emblem of romance

October 10, 2018
Placed first in Late 2018 standard contest by Brian Strand

Copyright © Vijay Pandit | Year Posted 2018

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Suzanne Delaney Date: 1/28/2019 10:36:00 AM Great metaphor. The words hold from beginning to end Hugs, SuZ Login to Reply

Brandy Nicole Date: 12/27/2018 3:10:00 PM Your words always move me. Congratulations Vijay, on this win. ~ Brandy Login to Reply

Heidi Sands Date: 12/27/2018 6:23:00 AM Congratulations for your win Vijay! :) Login to Reply

Pashang Salehi Date: 12/2/2018 10:28:00 PM Your words have so much power, like the moon on the tides. Login to Reply

Kai Michael Neumann Date: 11/7/2018 2:24:00 AM Such a 'real life' story. I have been there and have found new love, greater than ever. Kind wishes, Kai Login to Reply

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 10/26/2018 1:14:00 PM Love can bring such joy or equally such pain. We are the pawns often sacrificed. Beautifully composed Vijay! : ) Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 10/29/2018 3:11:00 PM Thank you Connie.

Liam Mcdaid Date: 10/18/2018 6:14:00 PM very beautifully painted deep excellent pen i dare say the moon still holds a smile from time to time Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 10/29/2018 3:10:00 PM Thank you Liam.

Paul Callus Date: 10/16/2018 3:11:00 PM A powerful rendition of pain and lost love, even though efforts were made to break the deadlock. Regards // paul Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 10/17/2018 5:39:00 PM Thank you Paul.

Chris Hagy Date: 10/14/2018 9:06:00 PM Beautifully written piece...so sad love changes from things that once were. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 10/17/2018 5:38:00 PM Thank you Chris.

Silent One Date: 10/14/2018 9:16:00 AM This one is so deep... great title.. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 10/17/2018 5:38:00 PM Thank you Silent One.

Janice Canerdy Date: 10/13/2018 4:48:00 PM So sad--well conveys the theme that they cannot retrieve what they once had. Janice Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 10/17/2018 5:38:00 PM Thank you Janice.

M. L. Kiser Date: 10/13/2018 11:02:00 AM Sad but, well done. Very well done... rejection is often met with indifference; this was powerful. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 10/13/2018 3:47:00 PM Thank you M.L.K.

Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/13/2018 9:50:00 AM All I can say is WOW! Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 10/13/2018 3:47:00 PM Thank you Richard.

Becca Teagan Date: 10/12/2018 2:22:00 PM Vijay, this is painfully lovely, hauntingly beautiful poetry. I love the way you've described the effects and symbolism of the moon. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 10/13/2018 6:43:00 AM Thank you Becca..delighted by your visit..appreciate your kind remarks.

Joanna Daniel Date: 10/11/2018 9:42:00 AM This is hauntingly sad, Vijay, the heartbreaking romance.. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 10/11/2018 5:16:00 PM Thank Jo, for your visit and feedback..I appreciate, as always.

Nette Onclaud Date: 10/11/2018 7:16:00 AM sentimental musings light the page, vijay... what an incredible play of emotion... huggs Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 10/11/2018 5:15:00 PM Thank you nette..appreciate the kind words.

M. L. Kiser Date: 10/11/2018 6:39:00 AM Sadly painful but beautifully penned; there's great imagery here; one can feel the heartbreak. Well done. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 10/11/2018 5:15:00 PM Thank you M.L.K. I appreciate your visit and comments.

Susan Ashley Date: 10/10/2018 8:52:00 PM The melancholy tone of your alluring title drew me into your sadly beautiful poem of heartbreak. Your last two lines are especially amazing in lost love imagery. A deep, moving and superb write, Vijay. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 10/11/2018 5:14:00 PM Thank you for your generous comments Susan..appreciate your support.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 10/10/2018 5:44:00 PM I really enjoyed the way you related the moon and how it once was filled with romantic feelings that are no more, Vijay Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 10/10/2018 6:16:00 PM Thank you Andrea for that observation. Many thanks for the visit..appreciate and value your opinion.

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 10/10/2018 5:36:00 PM Vijay, you express so brilliantly how an embittered heart is hard to heal! A masterful piece my friend! : ) Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 10/10/2018 6:15:00 PM Yes--the two hearts are hard to heal..thank you Connie for your visit and comments. Appreciate it as always.

Brandy Nicole Date: 10/10/2018 5:32:00 PM The gentle touch of love will stay- if it was meant to. If not, then it wasn't meant to be. When the sun sets, but there is no moon. It sounds like there isn't any hope to me. Very sad indeed. Your thoughts tug deeply at the heart. ~ Brandy Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 10/10/2018 6:14:00 PM Your analysis is spot on Brandy..many thanks for the visit..always appreciate your comments.

Joseph May Date: 10/10/2018 3:34:00 PM A reconciliation that wasn't written in the stars..Very nicely penned Vijay Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 10/10/2018 6:13:00 PM This reconciliation didn't pan out..thank you for the visit and comments, Joseph.

Mystic Rose Rose Date: 10/10/2018 1:13:00 PM Your romantic side is stoking the fire of it's beautiful emblems, both sun and moon do their part when it comes to love. another well written beauty, Vij, have a wonderful day. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 10/10/2018 6:12:00 PM Thank you Pixie..always happy to read your comments.

Mike Gentile Date: 10/10/2018 11:23:00 AM It does seem that some thing are just not meant to be as you so romantically and poetically express in your well written piece !! Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 10/10/2018 6:11:00 PM Somethings are not meant to be..so true, Mike..appreciate the comments..many thanks.

Lawrence Sharp Date: 10/10/2018 10:17:00 AM Very moody and, as always, visual. Very well penned. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 10/10/2018 11:09:00 AM Appreciate your comments Lawrence..many many thanks.

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