Brian Davey Poet Haiku

Moody Skies - - Split Haiku Contest

Sadness crying rain
                                            Dark storm clouds internal pain
                                                             Why
                                               Does the weather change

                                                   Monsoons emotion
                                             The sorrow that's in our skies
                                                             Why
                                                Does the weather cry

                                                  Blizzards of our pain               
                                            Flakes of soft petals presence
                                                             When
                                                    Does the sun arise

                                                  Clouds broken in two
                                            The first ray of hope has come
                                                             When
                                                     Does it ever stop


                                                           03/24/16

♡Like0

Share Poem

---

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Constance La France March 25, 2016 at 10:53 AM Brian, very nice and an interesting form presented to try for the contest, best of luck, 7 ~ Brian Davey March 26, 2016 at 3:20 AM thank you so much and I like trying out new forms of poetry you never know which one might suit your style, thank you and gl to you to

Daniel Turner March 24, 2016 at 7:11 PM Great job,Brian I think haikus are tough anyway. You.ve written a very meaningful poem Peace my friend:) Brian Davey March 24, 2016 at 9:44 PM Thank you so much my friend and you are right it is difficult to get the true meaning across to readers with the limitations on words being able to use so I appreciate the compliment. Have a great evening

Andrea Dietrich March 24, 2016 at 6:28 PM I like how you did a pattern here with WH questions. Nice!! Brian Davey March 24, 2016 at 7:08 PM Thank you Andrea I am glad u enjoyed the way it was done

Damien Knight March 24, 2016 at 5:50 PM Both Beautiful and sad wrapped up in one stormy piece of literature, well done and good luck in the contest Brian Davey March 24, 2016 at 5:55 PM Thank you so much Damien, been waiting non a new poem from you my friend??

Jan Allison March 24, 2016 at 5:48 PM Such emotions portrayed in so few words - good luck Brian:-) hugs Jan xx Jan Allison March 24, 2016 at 5:56 PM I've not tried this form - will have to see what my muse can come up with:-) hugs Jan Brian Davey March 24, 2016 at 5:54 PM Thank you Jan It was a fun one to wwrite I kind of like this style of Mystics Hiku's