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For Chetta Achara's Short form poetry x 3 poetry contest.

The aim is to write three different short forms. I used the following:

The quintilla is a Spanish poetic form that uses five-line stanzas. Each line is 8 syllables (Iambic tetrameter). This one is an aabba rhyme scheme.

The Triolet is a French verse form. Its rhyme scheme is ABaAabAB and all lines are in iambic tetrameter; the first, fourth and seventh lines are identical, as are the second and final lines, thereby making the initial and final couplets identical as well. The features of the Triolet are: 8 lines. Two rhymes. 5 of the 8 lines are repeated or refrain lines. First line repeats at the 4th and 7th lines. Second line repeats at the 8th line

A Jueju is a type of poem from China where each line has either five syllables or seven syllables. This one has 5 syllables.

Moods of Mourning

Season of death kisses in hues,
of gold, auburn and blood red views.
Cold air wraps around like a quilt.
Morbid clouds veil my sun with guilt.
As tears hide within misty dews.

Puffs of ash float in moods of mourning.
Heart sighs as thunder echoes in screams.
Lightning strikes as birds chirp a warning.
Puffs of ash float in moods of mourning,
as last rose wilts with no more forming.
Tears of rain reflect through broken dreams.
Puffs of ash float in moods of mourning.
Heart sighs as thunder echoes in screams.

Haunted eyes hide pain
when all's lost in vain.
My soul yearns for spring,
for joys blue skies bring.

Quintilla - Triolet - Jueju

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Phyllis Babcock

Date: 1/18/2024 10:25:00 AM

This title caught my eye and what a beautiful poem penned here my friend. love phyl

Karen Croft

Date: 1/15/2024 5:22:00 PM

Congratulations beautiful poem

Paige Hind

Date: 12/27/2023 5:40:00 PM

Beautiful! The combining of forms did this well.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/27/2023 6:32:00 AM

Masterfully rendered. So glad I dropped by this morning to admire this gem. Blessings Richard.

Hiya Sharma

Date: 12/27/2023 6:25:00 AM

Gosh, this is such a marvelous piece for the contest and you've woven such soul stirring depths here where the soul floats in ashes of melancholy and wishes to feel the arrival of spring to be caressed by hope.. I absolutely love the forms you've used here and also, I learnt a new one 'juejo'.. I had never heard about this form, until I read this.. You've so brilliantly made them flow together with your exquisite skills and eloquent rhymes.. "Season of death kisses in hues, of gold, auburn.. "

Hiya Sharma
Date: 12/27/2023 6:27:00 AM

"Puffs of ash float in moods of mourning","Haunted eyes hide pain when all's lost in vain" So many heartfelt emotions speak for themselves here.. I'm sure this will do very well in the contest, it truly should! Another fav..loved reading this.

Stephan McBride

Date: 12/26/2023 9:54:00 PM

Wow, love this, what a glorious journey you have taken us on in your beautiful gift of writing : ) thanks for sharing and your encouragement unto others in writing, : )

Bill Baker

Date: 12/26/2023 5:12:00 PM

Excellent entry for the contest, Silent One. Each of your three forms spoke to my emotions and deep feeling. I could feel the moods change and the positive and negative effects of each. I felt the experience of moods of morning, great title, my friend. A FAV and copied and pasted to a word doc as an example for future use. Thank You, Bill

Ink Empress

Date: 12/26/2023 2:28:00 PM

Ah silent one, you did this so well. I love your choice for forms, exquisite imagery as always and flow of descriptive diction. I absolutely love the way you’ve started with a quintilla that is like an entrance to the very moving and deeply touching word weaving especially how you’ve described “ season of death quilts the sun” ..is such a poetic was of depicting seasonal changes and so much more associated with that. I really love your triolet too. The refrains were not so noticeable because of

Ink Empress
Date: 12/26/2023 2:30:00 PM

The cadence and flow of them which only a poetic genius like you could do. And the jueju is brilliant, can feel the longing and also loss. Iv never tried jueju. Would love to try some short forms more. Pleasure reading this. This should score high i love it! Fave for me

Heidi Sands

Date: 12/26/2023 11:24:00 AM

Wow . A challenge that you mastered with this poem. The sadness comes through and the hope at the end is a nice surprise. Well done :)

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 12/26/2023 11:01:00 AM

Greetings SO each is beauty and sadness in its own right but leaves you with hope in your beautiful Jueju hugs Shadow

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/26/2023 9:36:00 AM

Yes, we start to long for spring as soon or before winter gets here. Thanks for sharing this one. If for a contest, it reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my page. Sara

The quintilla is a Spanish poetic form that uses five-line stanzas. Each line is 8 syllables (Iambic tetrameter). This one is an aabba rhyme scheme.

A Jueju is a type of poem from China where each line has either five syllables or seven syllables. This one has 5 syllables.

Moods of Mourning

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